WIP Diagnostic: Is This Working? A Closer Look at Show, Don’t Tell in Middle Grade

Critique By Janice Hardy, @Janice_Hardy

WIP Diagnostics is a weekly column that studies a snippet of a work in progress for specific issues. Readers are encouraged to send in work with questions, and we diagnose it on the site. It’s part critique, part example, and designed to help the submitter as well as anyone else having a similar problem.

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This week’s question:

Is this too much telling?

Market/Genre: Middle Grade

On to the diagnosis…

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