WIP Diagnostic: Is This Working? A Closer Look at Setting Up the Mystery in a First Page

Critique By Maria D'Marco

WIP Diagnostics is a weekly column that studies a snippet of a work in progress for specific issues. Readers are encouraged to send in work with questions, and we diagnose it on the site. It’s part critique, part example, and designed to help the submitter as well as anyone else having a similar problem.

If you're interested in submitting to WIP Diagnostics, please check out these guidelines. 

Submissions currently in the queue: Three

Please Note: As of today, critique slots are booked through November 14.

This week’s questions:

1. Does this opener hook the reader with tension, place and a sense of impending danger?

2. Is the plot set up sufficiently?

3. Is it too tight?

Market/Genre: Women’s Fiction

On to the diagnosis…

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