WIP Diagnostic: Is This Working? A Closer Look at Finding the Right Opening Scene

Critique By Maria D'Marco

WIP Diagnostics is a weekly column that studies a snippet of a work in progress for specific issues. Readers are encouraged to send in work with questions, and we diagnose it on the site. It’s part critique, part example, and designed to help the submitter as well as anyone else having a similar problem.

If you're interested in submitting to WIP Diagnostics, please check out these guidelines. 

Submissions currently in the queue: Zero

Please Note: As of today, critique slots are open.

This week’s questions:

1. Is there too much telling and not showing?

2. Am I’m forcing too much background into the opening?

3. Does the dialogue sound natural and believable? Is there too much dialogue?

4. is there anything you think I should improve on that I didn’t notice?

5. Would you want to keep reading?

Market/Genre: Unspecified

Note: This is another story we’ve followed through multiple revision.

On to the diagnosis…
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