CONFUSING ACTIONS MAKE YOUR PAGES DRY

The next time you’re not Explaining enough is your MC’s or other characters’ actions. That is they are doing something and that’s all you’re saying.

Yes. You’re just saying. ‘Then she jumped off of the roof,’ and you're saying it without telling us why.

Now, pay attention here. Maybe, you’ve mentioned and showed earlier with dialogues that someone has left her, or someone close to her died, or she lost her lawsuit, or her years of the company went bankrupt in Covid-19 … You may have explained the situation. But you didn’t tell me her thoughts. NOTE: Her Thoughts!