WIP Diagnostic: Is This Working? A Closer Look at Providing Narrative Clarity

Critique By Maria D'Marco

WIP Diagnostics is a weekly column that studies a snippet of a work in progress for specific issues. Readers are encouraged to send in work with questions, and we diagnose it on the site. It’s part critique, part example, and designed to help the submitter as well as anyone else having a similar problem.

If you're interested in submitting to WIP Diagnostics, please check out these guidelines.

Submissions currently in the queue: Five

Please Note: As of today, critique slots are booked through June 13.

This week’s question: 

I am seeking more than narrative clarity and hoping to bring over some feeling, some sense of there being an emotional build up, a sense of distress. Does this succeed?

Market/Genre: Not specified

On to the diagnosis…
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