WIP Diagnostic: Is This Working? A Closer Look at a Historical Middle Grade Opening

Critique By Janice Hardy, @Janice_Hardy

WIP Diagnostics is a weekly column that studies a snippet of a work in progress for specific issues. Readers are encouraged to send in work with questions, and we diagnose it on the site. It’s part critique, part example, and designed to help the submitter as well as anyone else having a similar problem.

If you're interested in submitting to WIP Diagnostics, please check out these guidelines. 

Submissions currently in the queue: six

Please Note: As of today, critique slots are booked through June 13.

This week’s questions:

1. Does this work and is it all in Freddy’s POV?

2. Is it all in Freddy’s POV?

3. Am I showing or telling?

Market/Genre: Young Adult

Note: This is a re-submission. Check out the first submission if you’re curious how the author revised.

On to the diagnosis…

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