WIP Diagnostic: Is This Working? A Closer Look at Point of View and Internalization

Critique By Janice Hardy, @Janice_Hardy

WIP Diagnostics is a weekly column that studies a snippet of a work in progress for specific issues. Readers are encouraged to send in work with questions, and we diagnose it on the site. It’s part critique, part example, and designed to help the submitter as well as anyone else having a similar problem.

If you're interested in submitting to WIP Diagnostics, please check out these guidelines. 

Submissions currently in the queue: Three

Please Note: As of today, critique slots are booked through May 2.

This week’s questions:

Do you think POV works? Have I done italics correctly? Am I handling staying in this victim's head okay? Am I showing too much?

Market/Genre: Historical Crime Fiction

On to the diagnosis…

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