Real Life Diagnostics: Does the Opening Page of This Magical Realism Tale Work?

Critique By Janice Hardy, @Janice_Hardy

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This week’s question:

Does this opening work?

Market/Genre: Magical Realism (Gothic Fairy Tale)

On to the diagnosis…
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