Please criticize me!

For those of you who purchased Raw Vengeance, I want to give you another "thanks".  What I'm asking for now is constructive criticism.  I need to polish my creative skills if I ever want to become one of the Brad Thors or Tom Clancys of the world.  I'll be the first to admit that my writing style is no where near perfect and will probably take two-to-three more novels to perfect.  In the meantime, I want to make my next thriller as entertaining and thrilling as my eccentric mind can make it.

I do not seek praise. If my book sucked, I want to know about it. Love it? Throw it at the wall in disgust? Any good artist or businessman needs to know where their product stands in consumer's eyes. I want specific examples of how I can make the plot flow better, the characters resonate, and pages keep turning. Is my grammar horrible? I can take it.

The first challenge I face is dealing with active versus passive sentence structures.  I'm slowly learning (oh dear, an adverb).  Another was my elaboration—or lack thereof—of my protagonist, Rich Fordham.  You got to know Tyler well but Rich's character needed to be more of a focus of the story.  Unfortunately, I think it was the liberal idealist in me that wanted to confront the issues surrounding Tyler's homosexuality.  I guess I need to stick to entertaining rather than being an activist.

When submitting a critique, don't be shy.  Post it publicly so we can create a dialogue.  Let me have it!