A balancing act: keeping the reader informed and interested

From Rick: Consider the following story opening: ========== TWO DAYS AGO: Tonight he’d do it. Severin had watched the place every night for the past week. His long, dark hair gelled back, his face black-smudged, and wearing black slacks and a black turtleneck to blend into the pleasant June night, he leaned on a railing […] ↓ Read the rest of this entry...