Real Life Diagnostics: Is Inserting a Flashback a Good or Bad Idea?

Critique By Janice Hardy, @Janice_Hardy

Real Life Diagnostics is a weekly column that studies a snippet of a work in progress for specific issues. Readers are encouraged to send in work with questions, and we diagnose it on the site. It’s part critique, part example, and designed to help the submitter as well as anyone else having a similar problem.

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This week’s questions:

1. What are your feelings about this character? Could you bond with her?

2. Is there enough tension to keep you reading?

3. What are your expectations from these opening lines?

4. In your view, what is the opening promise?

5. Is inserting the flashback a good or bad idea?

Market/Genre: Literary Fiction

On to the diagnosis…
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