Real Life Diagnostics: Would You Keep Reading This Space Opera?

Critique By Maria D'Marco

Real Life Diagnostics is a weekly column that studies a snippet of a work in progress for specific issues. Readers are encouraged to send in work with questions, and we diagnose it on the site. It’s part critique, part example, and designed to help the submitter as well as anyone else having a similar problem.

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This week’s questions:

1. Does this version set up the tension, conflict, and hook better than the previous version?

2. Would you keep reading? 

Market/Genre: Space Opera

Note: This is a resubmit. Here's the original RLD if you're curious to see how the author revised.

On to the diagnosis…
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