Can you guys help with some feedback?

The following is me reading part of chapter 5 from my memoir, “The Days of Guns, & Raz’s,” and tells the story of a very memorable day which changed my life forever. For all you die-hard Gunners, don't worry, in the next few days I will post a reading of a great GNR story that I think many of you will dig.Before I go any further on the project, I’d really appreciate your thoughts on what is to become an audiobook version of the book. I do believe that I have finally reached the point where I can start laying down tracks in earnest, and get’er done in a relatively short time. Well, short time in comparison to how long I have been talking about producing it. I look forward to all opinions. Good or bad, bring it. Any likes, shares, recommendations of changes, or just a thumbs up, would be met with heartfelt thanks.