Real Life Diagnostics: Does This Middle Grade Opening Draw You In?

Critique By Janice Hardy, @Janice_Hardy

Real Life Diagnostics is a weekly column that studies a snippet of a work in progress for specific issues. Readers are encouraged to send in work with questions, and we diagnose it on the site. It’s part critique, part example, and designed to help the submitter as well as anyone else having a similar problem.

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This week’s questions:

Does this opening page work? Does the first paragraph pull you in? Or does it sound to young and ordinary?

Market/Genre: Middle Grade

On to the diagnosis…

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