Real Life Diagnostics: Is the Opening and Voice of this Literary Novel Compelling?

Critique By Janice Hardy, @Janice_Hardy

Real Life Diagnostics is a weekly column that studies a snippet of a work in progress for specific issues. Readers are encouraged to send in work with questions, and we diagnose it on the site. It’s part critique, part example, and designed to help the submitter as well as anyone else having a similar problem.

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This week’s questions:

I’m curious if this opening and the “voice” are compelling. I am also curious if the dialogue sounds realistic.

Market/Genre: Literary fiction

On to the diagnosis…
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