Real Life Diagnostics: Does This Query Blurb Make You Want to Ask for Pages?

Critique By Janice Hardy, @Janice_Hardy

Real Life Diagnostics is a weekly column that studies a snippet of a work in progress for specific issues. Readers are encouraged to send in work with questions, and we diagnose it on the site. It’s part critique, part example, and designed to help the submitter as well as anyone else having a similar problem.

If you're interested in submitting to Real Life Diagnostics, please check out these guidelines.

Submissions currently in the queue: One

Please Note: As of today, RLD slots are booked through January 12.

This week’s question:

Does this query blurb draw attention and make you want to ask for pages?

Market/Genre: Romantic Thriller

On to the diagnosis…
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