Real Life Diagnostics: Does This Scene Work and Grab Your Attention?

Critique By Maria D'Marco

Real Life Diagnostics is a weekly column that studies a snippet of a work in progress for specific issues. Readers are encouraged to send in work with questions, and we diagnose it on the site. It’s part critique, part example, and designed to help the submitter as well as anyone else having a similar problem.

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Please Note: As of today, RLD slots are booked through December 8.

This week’s question:

Does this scene work and grab your attention? 

Market/Genre: Middle Grade

On to the diagnosis…
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