Revising indifference

Hello, Write Edge readers! I hope you’ve had a lovely start to your day. I would have posted this earlier today, but I hadn’t finished with my short story for this week yet. More on that in a moment.

First, let’s start the week off with some motivation! Here’s your quote to encourage you through the week, no matter what life passion you’re pursuing. I saw this on a billboard here in town and loved it right away:

“Stay afraid, but do it anyway.” —Caren Kreger, artist, via #goodtypetuesday challenge

Now on to that story. I wrote the first drafter earlier in the day and let it sit in the back of my head as I went through the rest of the day. It kept bugging me, although I couldn’t figure out what. When I sat down to read it again, I realized what bothered me about it: it across as indifferent.

I started picking at it. I began editing, revising, brainstorming. All of a sudden, I started having fun. The result is something I think you’ll enjoy even more than the original draft. Here’s an excerpt:

Topher chuckled real loud, as if trying to catch out the dudes who had planted the book. It had to be plant, right? For one of those reality shows the lowest losers watched? The bag patrol may have labeled him a loser, but even Topher knew he wasn’t a lowest loser. Those kids were a special breed all their own.

In the middle of the week, I’ll have a brand new book review for you. Earlier in September, the novel #FashionVictim by Amina Akhtar released. Find out on Wednesday what I thought about this snarky thriller. You’ll see the review on The Write Edge Bookshelf!

At the end of the week, of course, we’ll go back to my parenting adventures. This week is a full post. Come back on Friday to find out what my kids and I are up on Growth Chart!

Have a great day, readers!

E.R.G.