Real Life Diagnostics: Does This Opening Bore or Interest You to Read More?

Critique By Maria D'Marco

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This week’s question:

1. Does this opening bore or interest you to read more?

Market/Genre: Women's Fiction

This is a resubmit. If you're curious to see how the author revised, here's the previous version.

On to the diagnosis…

Written by Janice Hardy. Fiction-University.com