The Other Discovery Draft I’m Keeping

It’s way too short, it’s missing a lot of information, and it ends abruptly (Discovery Draft!) but this one stays, too, with much rewriting in it’s future.  There’s the scene in the apartment with Lily, then the non-scene with the marriage chat, and then Nita goes to work and this stuff happens.  Can I get some agreement now that marriage chat has to go because nothing happens in it?  Thank you.

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When Nita had gone to work, Nick sat down at the table, exhausted. 

Well, not exhausted.  You’re dead.  Just overworked.

He let his façade drop to conserve energy, pushed away the last of the food cartons, and pulled out the three records he was most interested in.

Rab came through the door and screamed.

“What?” he said, and Rab turned away his hand over his eyes.

“Façade!”  Rab said. “Façade!”

Nick put up his façade again.  “Fine.  Façade. You’ve seen me as a skeleton before. What’s wrong with you?”

Rab looked at him cautiously and then came into the room. “Dude, you are changing.”

“Dude?” Nick said.

“Sorry, archaic slang.”  Rab stole another look at him  and shuddered.  

“Rab.”

“You have juicy parts,” Rab said.  “Like . . . organs.”

“Organs.  No.” Nick got up and went into the kitchen and yanked open drawers in the new cabinets until he found the knives. 

He pulled out a knife and stabbed himself in the arm.

Nothing.

“No blood,” he said, showing his arm to Rab. 

“I know what I saw,” Rab said.  “Do notdrop that façade around Nita.  Or me.  Or anybody.  And stop stabbing yourself, that’s going to lead to tears.”

“Rab, I’m dead,” Nick said, but Rab was still talking.

“Bad flashbacks to beginning human anatomy class.  They had these pictures on acetate that started with the skeleton and then did the organs and then did the vascular system and then did the muscles–”

“Rab.”

“You’re on the organ acetate,” Rab said.  “There was a lot of pink . . . things . . . attached . . .”

“Rab.”

“Your skull is pretty much the same except you have eyes.” Rab shuddered, looking away.  “You know, it’s gonna take me awhile to forget that.”

“Get me a mirror,” Nick said.  “Big enough that I can see my body.”

“There’s one in the basement,” Rab said.  “I’ll send Jeo up with it.”

“Jeo?”

“I’m gonna need some time,” Rab said and left.

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