Real Life Diagnostics: Is This Scene Working?

Critique By Maria D'Marco 

Real Life Diagnostics is a weekly column that studies a snippet of a work in progress for specific issues. Readers are encouraged to send in work with questions, and we diagnose it on the site. It’s part critique, part example, and designed to help the submitter as well as anyone else having a similar problem.

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This week’s questions:

1. Is the scene working?

2. Did it make you want to read on?

Market/Genre: Psychological Suspense

On to the diagnosis…
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