Real Life Diagnostics: Do You Connect with This Main Character?

Critique By Maria D'Marco

Real Life Diagnostics is a weekly column that studies a snippet of a work in progress for specific issues. Readers are encouraged to send in work with questions, and we diagnose it on the site. It’s part critique, part example, and designed to help the submitter as well as anyone else having a similar problem.

If you're interested in submitting to Real Life Diagnostics, please check out these guidelines.

Submissions currently in the queue: Two

Please Note: As of today, RLD slots are booked through May 19.

This week’s questions:

Do you connect with the main character? Does it give you a better feel for who she is and what she wants? Is there enough happening in the beginning to catch your interest and keep you reading?

Market/Genre: YA Fantasy

Note: This is a revised submission. If you’d like to see how the writer revised, check out the original page.

On to the diagnosis…
Read more »Written by Janice Hardy. Fiction-University.com