Open Critique: Obscurity

Tapa Tasneem has bravely offered up their chapter for me to sink my teeth into. I enjoyed reviewing this opening and could see how a lot of small tweaks in the writing style could really bring out the best in it.

Here’s my line review:

Hans Hayder was never told no by anyone.

His heart pulsed against his chest as he felt the cigarette climb to his mouth and exhaled with an aura of tranquillity