Cut That Wimpy Dialogue!

Dialogue should be focused to further your plot or reveal character. If your characters sound weak, you steal from your story by reducing their appeal. Who wants to read about people less decisive and more wishy-washy than we are? Not your average reader. Here are some examples to illustrate my point.

Choose one of each:

"I think we should hit the beach at dawn. That way, we'll probably be able to avoid the patrol boats."
OR
"We'll hit the beach at dawn to avoid the patrol boats."

"It is my belief that it would be best if we took the right-hand path."
OR
"Let's make a right-hand turn."

"I suppose I could agree."
OR
"I agree."

"I guess it would be all right if you borrowed my bracelet, but if you don't mind, please try to return it tomorrow."
OR
"You can borrow the bracelet, but I'd like it returned tomorrow."

"Well, I don't know. I suppose I could research it for you."
OR
"I'll find out and let you know by Monday."

If you chose any "A" answers, you're making your character sound weak. To strengthen your heroine, have her sound positive and determined. Characters should focus on their goals, not on their insecurities. Avoid phrases such as: I think, I guess, I suppose, maybe we should, it's my belief that, or I don't know.

Exceptions to the rule do exist. Just make certain your character doesn't sound wimpy when he speaks or has an introspection. Cutting extra verbiage can help. Aim for precision of speech, but avoid curtness. Phrases that reveal hesitation or self-doubt may indicate places that need revision, unless it's part of your character's personal arc. Strong characters appeal to readers, so make every word count!

Do you have any examples from your own work that you can share?

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