Learning to Write Emotional Pitches

Novella on Wattpad of dystopian sci fi screenplay THE MOTHER SIEGE

Roadmap Writers is an online site for screenwriters, and I have taken several paid courses via this site. Most recently I took a two-session course MARKETING YOUR SCRIPT taught by Ben Everard, executive producer of the horror film LIGHTS OUT. Everard provided extremely valuable insights including the importance of getting emotion into pitches. After two weeks of Everard’s coaching, below is the pitch that I wrote for my sci fi thriller THE MOTHER SIEGE:

THE MOTHER SIEGE is a sci fi thriller — think GATTACA meets CHILDREN OF MEN.

Adapted from my sci fi novella, THE MOTHER SIEGE was partly inspired by my own experiences as the mother of a child with health issues. I wanted to explore how the current advances in genetic engineering and government monitoring could go wrong.

In the near future of THE MOTHER SIEGE a corporation has figured out how to completely encapsulate a large portion of the U.S. In the 20 years that the corporation has controlled this land mass, government sperm banks have been set up to provide women with two live births, and fathers are now totally anonymous.

As the story opens, the next step of total mind control has just been announced. Mothers must surrender all their children from ages six months to 18 years to government propaganda centers where the children will be totally cut off from any contact with their mothers.

One mother — a pediatrician who has hid her undocumented asthmatic child since the child’s birth — dares to resist. (Think Charlize Theron or Angelina Jolie.) She bands together with two other mothers — including a surveillance expert (think Gina Torres) — and a mother-to-be to escape with their children from the encapsulated land mass.

The mothers must risk their own lives and those of their children without knowing what, if anything, exists outside the encapsulated land mass.

And if they do manage to escape to “something,” will they only be jumping from the frying pan into the fire?

If you want to read the actual screenplay of THE MOTHER SIEGE on Amazon Studios, click here. Or read the novella of THE MOTHER SIEGE on Wattpad at http:/budurl.com/MSintro

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Phyllis Zimbler Miller (@ZimblerMiller) has an M.B.A. from The Wharton School and is the author of fiction and nonfiction books/ebooks. Phyllis is available by skype for book group discussions and may be reached at pzmiller@gmail.com

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