Real Life Diagnostics: Would You Keep Reading this Fantasy Opening?

Critique By Maria D'Marco

Real Life Diagnostics is a weekly column that studies a snippet of a work in progress for specific issues. Readers are encouraged to send in work with questions, and we diagnose it on the site. It’s part critique, part example, and designed to help the submitter as well as anyone else having a similar problem.

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This week’s questions:

1. Does the opening give one a sense of place; i.e. This is Olympus?

2. Does the opening conflict sound dire enough to be believable?

3. Is the writing sufficient for an opening scene or should it have more conflict?

Market/Genre: Fantasy

On to the diagnosis…
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