Life has moved on updated
Here is the first version of this Pantoun I have since reworked it please see the second version any thoughts if either works?
I flutter and fly like a trapped butterfly
Commitment I promised it wasn’t a lie
While life has moved your love I still crave
It applies throughout life into the grave
Commitment, I promised it wasn’t a lie
I tried to stay true but you said goodbye
It applies throughout life into the grave
Once word is given it shouldn’t enslave
I stayed true but you said goodbye
Needs, change the picture I understand why
Once word is given, it should not enslave
We should try to honour it be strong and brave
Needs change the picture I understand why
You need to move on although I shall cry
Though we should try to honour it, be strong and brave
Throw out commitment, morality waive
You need to move on although I shall cry
I will find a way, to fly in the sky
Throw out commitment morality waive
I keep my values my sanity to save
I will find a way to fly in the sky
While life has moved your love I still crave
I keep my values my sanity to save
I flutter and fly like a trapped butterfly.
Written in the form Pantoum .
Version 2.
I flutter and fly like a trapped butterfly
The commitment you promised was a big lie
Now you have gone your love I still crave
It will probably stay till I go to my grave
The commitment, you promised was a big lie
I wanted to stay true but you said goodbye
It will probably stay till I go to my grave
Although a love once given, shouldn’t be betrayed
I wanted to stay true but you said goodbye
You changed the picture I don’t understand why
Although a love once given, shouldn’t be betrayed
We should try to honour it be strong and brave
You changed the picture I don’t understand why
You left with such bitterness it’s hard to justify
Though we should try to honour it, be strong and brave
There comes a time with sadness our feelings to waive
You left with such bitterness it’s hard to justify
I need to rebuild my life and just quantify
There comes a time with sadness our feelings to waive
The old life with you has nothing to save
I need to rebuild my life and just quantify
Now you have gone your love I still crave
But the old life with you has nothing to save
I flutter and fly like a freed butterfly
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