#minutewriters Yoda said it best - “Do or do not - there...

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#minutewriters Yoda said it best - “Do or do not - there is no try!” Why you should cut “try” from your ms. Examples below of sentences where I nixed “try” and made it more active! #writingadvice #writing

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Ben tried to make his voice lighter, but it sounded pained even to his ears. —> Ben made his voice lighter, but it sounded pained to his ears.

Ben tried to ignore them as someone broke off from a group of priests, causing all on the steps to turn like banners pulling to follow a breeze. —> Ben ignored them as someone broke off from a group of priests, causing all on the steps to turn like banners pulling to follow a breeze.

Lu’s eyes flew open. Panic tried to break through, but she knew what to do with panic. —> Lu’s eyes flew open. Panic broke through, but she knew what to do with panic.