revising-beta reading

Still have only one beta reader's comments. Show and Tell are kinda of subjective so I really would like more input there. The other beta reader hasn't responded yet.

But I can put in more imagery, it probably could use some. Not sure about getting the scenes to be more united. There are things that happen that are suppose to tie them altogether but maybe a couple more? And more baseball references probably would be good too. I did rush them.