#minutewriters video! Brief note about “there.” As...

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#minutewriters video! Brief note about “there.” As mentioned in the video, some examples from my own writing where I reworked “there” (as well as a few I kept!):

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Changed “there”:

Would there be guards on the other side? —> Would guards be on the other side? |

There isn’t anyone in my whole country I can trust —> I can’t trust anyone in my whole country |

There, nestled alongside tufts of rock far off the coast, Lu saw new silhouettes. —> New silhouettes nestled alongside tufts of rock far off the coast. 

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Kept “there”:

“There’s my darling.” |

Ben looked at Jakes, whose face held pity at the duty he knew Ben faced. But something was there beyond sympathy: a reverence for their work. |

If they wanted to die, let them die—there were ways to survive, if they weren’t so stupid and proud.