Exploiting You: Blurb Nita (Rev.) (Rev. Again) (Rev. Again)

I am swamped today, but I stopped to read the Book Bub e-mail and remembered that Nita still needed a blurb. This one is awful. Fix it, please.

Detective Nita “Spooky” Dodd protects and serves Demon Island, a definitely non-supernatural island amusement park/tourist trap that is flooded every summer with drunk people in green make-up pretending to be demons, or as Nita calls them, asshats. When Nick Giordano shows up in the off-season claiming to be (a) dead and (b) next in line to serve as Devil in Hell, Nita dismisses him as an early asshat. But as the evidence piles up, Nita is forced to reconsider all her assumptions about reality in general and about Nick in particular. And then she finds out that even she is not what she thought she was. It’s a damn good thing the Devil has her back . . .

The Devil in Nita Dodd

A little bad can be very good.

Yeah, that last line in particular sucks. But I know you will all have MUCH BETTER ideas. You always do.

Second Pass:

Detective Nita Dodd protects and serves Demon Island, home of The Devil’s Playground, a definitely non-supernatural amusement park/tourist trap, so when Nick Giordano shows up in the off-season claiming to be (a) dead and (b) next in line to serve as the Devil in Hell, Nita thinks he’s either a conman or a crazy. But as the supernatural evidence begins to pile up and people keep trying to kill her, Nita begins to reconsider her idea of reality, along with her feelings for the Devil she knows.

The Devil in Nita Dodd

A little bad can be very good.

Third Pass, 57 words (not counting title):

Detective Nita Dodd protects and serves Demon Island, site of a definitely non-supernatural amusement park, so when Nick Giordano shows up claiming to be (a) dead and (b) the Devil, Nita thinks he’s a conman. But as the supernatural evidence piles up, Nita reconsiders her idea of reality, and with it her feelings for the Devil she knows.

The Devil in Nita Dodd

Fourth Pass: 50 words, still not right:



When Nick Giordano shows up on Demon Island claiming to be (a) dead and (b) the Devil, Detective Nita Dodd thinks he’s a conman. But as the evidence piles up that reality is not what she thought, Nita has second thoughts, especially about the Devil she’s just beginning to know.

OR

When Nick Giordano shows up on Demon Island claiming to be (a) dead and (b) the Devil, Detective Nita Dodd thinks he’s a conman. But as evidence piles up that the supernatural is real, Nita reconsiders her assumptions . . . especially the ones about the Devil she knows.

Also, latest collage:

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