Book re-view for The Bullier

 Book re-view for
The Bullierby Rebecca c Benamati


I have read up to the end of the free per-viwe, and I would say, there is a start here to a story, that could go places, yet it has many missing links- and is just a wall of run- on and fragments... that are said over and over, with nothing really said, why is it sounding so child- like, to make it more readable say what you mean. There are many countless things, that I see that make my want to scream like a freaking nut case, swearing profanity’s at your for not knowing 2nd grade English, I just want to say- ‘oh my god- like, she didn't!’ In this young writers why's of doing thing, I want to be nice about this- I love that you have the girl-ie balls to tell your story... good for you- in doing so. See this " use it. Math needs that... always cap, an I please- thanks... hey don't think of this as me being a dick to you- I love to see you giving it your all. Work on your craft and you go places you never dreamed of. 3 lines of text, should be one paragraph, at this point with your past history of not have English under your belt, I would say this is not bad, yet I look at this and say- holy fucking dick shit there are more than six mistakes in one line of text. Someone tell why this is…? Ok – wow it’s… Okay- see that? That would be the right spelling here."Your high-school teachers have failed you- and it shows in the text. This is not on you…!" Sorry to say your writing is at and or less then second grade, and your grammar is at suck; you don't have anything listed about what the book is or what it stands for.
Why should I read it/ spend my hard eared money on for it.
What is the hook? Y
ou don't have one- as of this point, and I should have seen it by now.

The best part was the rat- to me that was the first page, of what should have been the first chapter starting lines of wording. You need to see that... you have not done this yet way would it be in the past? 3rd- hummm?

You do not need sixty exclamations, to show your happy or sad- by the way we frown on that, find more moving was to say how you sense.  

No and Know- who and whom ... awwwahhh!‘A lot’ is a piece of land… found out why I say this.Remember: this is just my thoughts, of someone that walled the same vary halls as the hunted, some of this town; would ask: “why- I would make a comment?” Saying: “how would he know…“ “were the crow shits in the buckwheat.” Yet, I have the free rights too… best of luck!