Son of a Pitch: Peer Critique Round

Welcome to the first round of Son of a Pitch! This week is all about getting feedback from your peers, as you can tell from the title! Use the formatting below, and leave a link to your entry in the comments. And please jump around to the other links to leave feedback to at least three others. Your perspective could be invaluable to someone.
***Note: Participation in this round isn't a prerequisite to the rest of the comp, but it will give you an edge in the next few rounds.***

***Please do not leave replies in the comments. The comments are for links only. If you wish to say something, go to the link provided and comment there. Thank you!***
Formatting:Title: (Name of Manuscript)Age and Genre: (YA/NA/Adult then Genre)Word Count: (to the nearest thousand)
Query:Insert query here. No bio please.
First 250 Words:i don't care if this is from a prologue or chapter one. That's up to you.
Entries for the next round will open on Friday at 10 a.m. PDST. Please use the formatting above and email to:
sonofapitchcomp@yahoo.com.au
Incorrectly formatted emails will be returned. The  first fifty entries  will go into this round. A post will go live at that time, and will show CLOSED once all fifty places are filled. Those who make it through will receive a confirmation email.
Good luck!