Another Rewrite

It seems like every time someone looks at a novel, they inject their own opinion about how it should work. As a result of the last couple of readers' comments, I did another rewrite of THE MOURNING PARADE before sending it out to more agents.

Okay, lesson here: when you start sending out a manuscript that comes close (in my case, several of the top agents in NYC asked to see a full copy of the novel) but isn't getting picked up (by either agents or editors), then it's time to look at their comments and determine whether there's any validity to them. If you think anything that they say has any credibility, then you should think about making the changes you're comfortable with.

In the case of MOURNING, I'd heard from two people that the tension between the antagonist and protagonist was uneven. Hopefully, I fixed that. And one of the agents suggested another point of view. I'd gotten mixed comments about that idea, but I considered it.

Instead of exploring the point of view of one of the humans, I chose to delve into the other important character's perspective: the elephant.

At this point, I have no idea whether that will work for the agents who are going to read the new version, but we'll soon see, and I'll let you know the outcome!