How to Get the Best Edit Evah!

I've got a guest post today over at the Savvy Authors website in which I dish out ten quick tips for giving your manuscript a final polish before it goes into editing.  Just thought I'd pass on some things I've noted through my editing role that've helped me with my own writing.

Arg! I just noticed a problem w/ my post over there.  The strikeouts for my example were eliminated, so it's a little confusing.  I've notified my contact, but until it gets straightened out, this version of points 6-10 will be easier to follow:

 For the points below, I'll use the following excerpt (in which it will become abundantly clear I spent way too many hours reading Archie comics at my grandma's).  There's nothing wrong with the excerpt grammatically, but I'm sure you'll agree it can be improved.  We'll refine it in stages.
Excerpt
            Joe wanted to go to the pool. "Hey, Alex, do you want to go to the pool?" he asked as he pointed his thumb in the direction of the local swimming pool.             Alex wasn't sure whether he wanted to go.  He scratched his head and said, "I don't know, Joe.  Why do you want to go to the pool?"            Joe answered.  "Because it's hot at the pool, Alex."            Alex turned his head and looked at the thermostat. He was confused. "It's only seventy degrees, Joe.  That's not hot."            Joe rolled his eyes.  He reached out and put both hands on either side of Alex's face.  He turned his friend's head away from the thermostat. He turned it toward the pool.  Two scantily clad girls were paying their pool admission.              "Like I said, Alex—it's hot at the pool," Joe said.                Alex smiled. Now he wanted to go to the pool. "Let's go to the pool, Joe."              
6. Eliminate unnecessary physical movements
As writers, we picture everything as it happens and we want to convey our vision to readers so we tend to over-describe physical movements.  But spelling out every little detail will not only bore readers, it'll break the flow.  If the action can be assumed or it doesn't add any new information to the passage, carve it out.   
Excerpt refined (step 6):
            Joe wanted to go to the pool. "Hey, Alex, do you want to go to the pool?" he asked as he pointed his thumb in the direction of the local swimming pool.             Alex wasn't sure whether he wanted to go.  He scratched his head and said, "I don't know, Joe.  Why do you want to go to the pool?"            Joe answered.  "Because it's hot at the pool, Alex."            Alex turned his head and looked at the thermostat. He was confused. "It's only seventy degrees, Joe.  That's not hot."            Joe rolled his eyes.  He reached out and put both hands on either side of Alex's face.  He turned his friend's head away from the thermostat. He turned it toward the pool.  Two scantily clad girls were paying their pool admission.              "Like I said, Alex—it's hot at the pool," Joe said.                Alex smiled.  Now he wanted to go to the pool. "Let's go to the pool, Joe."
7. Eliminate redundant narrative that's covered in the dialogue or elsewhere.

Excerpt refined (step 7):
            Joe wanted to go to the pool. "Hey, Alex, do you want to go to the pool?" Joe he asked.             Alex wasn't sure whether he wanted to go.  Alex He scratched his head and said, "I don't know, Joe.  Why do you want to go to the pool?"            Joe answered.  "Because it's hot at the pool, Alex."            Alex looked at the thermostat. He was confused.  "It's only seventy degrees, Joe.  That's not hot."            Joe rolled his eyes.  He turned his friend's head away from the thermostat. He turned it toward the pool.  Two scantily clad girls were paying their pool admission.              "Like I said, Alex—it's hot at the pool," Joe said.                Alex smiled.  Now he wanted to go to the pool.  "Let's go to the pool, Joe."

8. Eliminate unnecessary dialogue tags
If it's obvious who's saying it, you don't need a dialogue tag.

9. Cut back on names in dialogue
Using names in dialogue is another natural tendency in writing that doesn't work so well for readers. 
Excerpt refined (steps 8 & 9):
             "Hey, Alex, do you want to go to the pool?" Joe asked.            Alex scratched his head and said, "I don't know, Joe.  Why do you want to go to the pool?"            Joe answered.  "Because it's hot at the pool, Alex."            Alex looked at the thermostat. "It's only seventy degrees, Joe.  That's not hot."            Joe rolled his eyes.  He turned his friend's head away from the thermostat. He turned it toward the pool.  Two scantily clad girls were paying their pool admission.              "Like I said, Alex—it's hot at the pool," Joe said.                Alex smiled.  "Let's go to the pool, Joe."

10. Vary sentence structure
Not every sentence can begin with a participial phrase; neither should they all be short and direct nor predominately long and winding. Our excerpt has a lot of medium-sized, simple sentences that make it somewhat dull, so I've changed things up and added variety.  

Final excerpt:
            "Hey, Alex, do you want to go swimming?" Joe asked.            Alex scratched his head. "I don't know.  Why?"            "Because it's hot at the pool."            Alex looked at the thermostat. "Since when is seventy degrees hot?"            Joe rolled his eyes.  He turned his friend's head away from the thermostat and toward the pool where two scantily clad girls paid their admission.              "Like I said—it's hot at the pool."             Alex smiled.  "Let's go swimming, Joe."
This final excerpt is a lean and mean  74 words versus 156 in the beginning excerpt—that's half!  And has it lost any substance at all?