Here's something I was thinking about that's often a problem--scenes with no clear point of view or image of what's happening.
Consider the
following conversations between Billy and Redge. Which is easier to picture or
gives you a visual image of the two brothers and what they’re feeling?
“I got to tell you something, Billy,” said
Redge.
“What?”
“I killed Mooney,” he said with a nod.
“You
Published on November 03, 2015 05:10