POV and Dialogue with Billy and Redge

Here's something I was thinking about that's often a problem--scenes with no clear point of view or image of what's happening.

Consider the
following conversations between Billy and Redge. Which is easier to picture or
gives you a visual image of the two brothers and what they’re feeling?

“I got to tell you something, Billy,” said
Redge.

“What?”

“I killed Mooney,” he said with a nod.

“You
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Published on November 03, 2015 05:10
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