Review for "Mandy"

 Reviewed By Jessyca Garcia for Readers’ Favorite

There are things that I really liked about Marcel Ray Duriez’s book A Panda Bear Named Mandy and there were some things I did not like. The story was cute and I liked that it rhymed but it came out too quickly. One page Mandy is in school, the next she is at a playground with her father. If the author can focus on one thing like Mandy goes to School or Mandy Spends a Day with Dad, then the story will make a little more sense and there could even be a Mandy series.

The way the story is written out is in a paragraph. If it was written in the form of a poem the story would flow better and children can see the rhyming words easier. This will make it a lot easier and more interesting for children to read.

The illustrations are hand drawn, which I like, but they do appear blurry at times. Some of the pictures are hard to see what exactly is happening in them. If there is a way to make them bigger and have the story’s words on top of them it might appear better. The story is short but it needs to be badly edited because there are a lot of spelling and punctuation errors in it. On page 3 it reads “lines casted”. It should say lines cast. On page nine the word is “grown” but it is supposed to say groan. These are just a couple errors that I am pointing out.

I like the idea that Mandy is a panda bear. There are not too many stories about panda bears out there. Once the story is edited better I am sure it will do well, especially with children just learning how to read.


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