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Critique Group – Love is Blind

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Please conduct yourself properly.

Don’t forget the critiquing guidelines. All I ask is that you post a comment about the submission below. Don’t feel like you have to critique the whole piece. Even a short comment on one aspect can be helpful.If you want to submit a manuscript for critique, please read the guidelines as well as this list of common mistakes to avoid before submitting.

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Critique Group – Beautiful

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I think it depends on which draft you’re working on.

Don’t forget the critiquing guidelines. All I ask is that you post a comment about the submission below. Don’t feel like you have to critique the whole piece. Even a short comment on one aspect can be helpful.If you want to submit a manuscript for critique, please read the guidelines as well as this list of common mistakes to avoid before submitting.

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Search for The Astral Dragon – Part Two: Emotional Bonding

[image error]Let’s continue analyzing the beginning of this story, this time with emotional bonding in mind.

Here is a link to the story’s first two chapters:

Story Development – A Space Adventure

This time we will look at the aspects I raised in the following post:

Writing Tips – Creating an Emotional Connection with Readers (Part One)

Here are the aspects I try to include when creating an emotional bond with readers:

Physical need – A common handicap, illness, or negative environment Emotional issue...

Search for The Avenger Analysis – Part Two: Emotional Bonding

[image error]Let’s continue analyzing the beginning of this story, this time with emotional bonding in mind.

Here is a link to the story’s first two chapters:

Story Development – A Space Adventure

This time we will look at the aspects I raised in the following post:

Writing Tips – Creating an Emotional Connection with Readers (Part One)

Here are the aspects I try to include when creating an emotional bond with readers:

Physical need – A common handicap, illness, or negative environment Emotional issue...

Search for the Astral Dragon Analysis – Part One

[image error]Let’s analyze the beginning of this story and see how it satisfies the suggestions I made for a good story launch:

Here is a link to the story’s first two chapters:

Story Development – A Space Adventure

We will first look at the list I provided in the link below:

Writing Tips: How to Start a Story (The Ordinary World – Part 1)

1. Grab the reader’s attention with a hook beginning

The first sentence is – “I woke to another morning in outer space.”

Since my target audience is 8 to 12 years old...

Search for the Avenger Analysis – Part One

[image error]Let’s analyze the beginning of this story and see how it satisfies the suggestions I made for a good story launch:

Here is a link to the story’s first two chapters:

Story Development – A Space Adventure

We will first look at the list I provided in the link below:

Writing Tips: How to Start a Story (The Ordinary World – Part 1)

1. Grab the reader’s attention with a hook beginning

The first sentence is – “I woke to another morning in outer space.”

Since my target audience is 8 to 12 years old...

Story Development – A Space Adventure

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I am posting this beginning of my new story to discuss aspects of story development, which I hope will take place in the comments section. I posted earlier versions of it almost two years ago, and this is updated with the inclusion of a second chapter. This is a rough draft and is subject to heavy editing, so feel free to make suggestions.

In the comments section, I hope we can talk about how I employed the Hero’s Journey elements that I discussed in earlier posts such as the following:

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Critique Group – Once Upon a Dragon

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Yes, please. I’m sure it’s beautiful and informative, but the story gets kind of stuck in the mud.

Don’t forget the critiquing guidelines. All I ask is that you post a comment about the submission below. Don’t feel like you have to critique the whole piece. Even a short comment on one aspect can be helpful.

If you want to submit a manuscript for critique, please read the guidelines as well as this list of common mistakes to avoid before submitting.

This post will stay active indefinitely, so...

Critique Group – Stronghold Part 2

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I didn’t have time to come up with a funny image this week, so here is an “I got nothing” image.

Don’t forget the critiquing guidelines. All I ask is that you post a comment about the submission below. Don’t feel like you have to critique the whole piece. Even a short comment on one aspect can be helpful.

If you want to submit a manuscript for critique, please read the guidelines as well as this list of common mistakes to avoid before submitting.

This post will stay active indefinitely, so y...

Critique Group – Insanity

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Don’t forget the critiquing guidelines. All I ask is that you post a comment about the submission below. Don’t feel like you have to critique the whole piece. Even a short comment on one aspect can be helpful.

If you want to submit a manuscript for critique, please read the guidelines as well as this list of common mistakes to avoid before submitting.

This post will stay active indefinitely, so you can come back and add comments at any time. If you are the writer who is being critiqued, you...