Status Updates From The Secret of the Old Clock

“How could I have overslept on a morning like this?” she chided herself”

Nice little detail. Of course she overslept, she had quite an ordeal.

“You can discourage me all you want to, Dad, but I’m not going to stop hoping!” Nancy said”

Ugh.

“He’s making every effort to speed up the settlement of the estate.”

Ah, this is why we care.

“If not,” her father put in, “your discovery will strike them at an especially awkward time.”
Nancy paused on the stairs and turned to face her father. “What do you mean?”

New developments while you were locked in a closet waiting to die.

“I don’t like to have you take such risks. I am very grateful indeed that you are back home safe.”

There we go. Last thing he says before they go their own separate way.

“Carson Drew stared at his daughter with mingled pride and amazement.
“You’re a good detective, Nancy”

That’s all he has to say?
Maybe he doesn’t realize his daughter could’ve been killed. Or care?

“To whom it may concern: My last will and testament will be found in safe-deposit box number 148 in the Merchants Trust Company”

How dumb is this?

“Fastened to one page was a very thin, flat key with a tag marked 148”

She didn't notice a bulging key before? I don't care how thin it is, it's not paper thin.

“He phoned earlier that something unexpected had come”

Conveniently missing parent at a crucial moment.

“Why—er—yes, if you wish,” Nancy replied. “But first I want to show you something,” she added, as he opened the door for her. “I have some stolen property here.”

Back and forth and back and forth. In the end she volunteered the info?

“Should she reveal this information? She decided against doing so”

Lying to the police. Some life to her after all

“Perhaps I’d better phone the State Police from the first service station or store I come to”

Or the Inn you were just at.

“I’ll read the notebook later,” she decided, and tucked it into her pocket”

What are you talking about? Who cares about the furniture? Find the will!

“Nancy took a small screw driver from the glove compartment”

Random.

“Since the clock was too unwieldy to open inside the car”

It's a mantel clock, how bad can it be?

“Cut out the yaking! We ain’t got no time for a fight unless we want to land behind bars!”
“And if we do, it’ll be your fault, Sid Sax. You left that girl to starve—”
“Shut up!” the leader snarled.”

“The thieves were obviously in a quarrelsome mood”

Classic 'no honor amongst thieves'

“But as she stood staring at it, her keen ears detected the sound of voices. The thieves!
“I’ll be caught!” flashed through her mind”

Her keen ears?

“sometimes hide automobile keys under the floor mat. It was barely possible that the thieves had done this.”

Oh boy, what good luck!

“Anxiously Nancy glanced toward the inn, but so far as she could tell, her actions were unobserved. There was no one in sight.”

“when a sudden thought occurred to her.”

“Acting on the impulse, Nancy sprinted to her car”

Getting some personality from Nancy, finally.

“There were tire marks which could belong to Sid’s van! They led to the barn!”

How can she know the tire marks match?

“It was a slim hope, she knew, but the thieves might have”

Let's see if her luck holds up.

“If only I can overtake the truck and somehow examine the Crowley clock before I have to report to the police!” she thought.”

Why does she feel she needs to work around the police?

“It’ll be strictly guesswork from here,” Officer Elton said to Nancy.”

My favorite part of Sherlock Holmes is when he takes 50/50 guesses. *Sarcasm*

The will better not be inside this dumb clock.

“Though I doubt that those men would be so reckless.”

From where is she drawing her conclusions?

“Nancy decided to convince the man beyond doubt. She gave a long, loud feminine scream.”

What's this false conflict doing here?

“panic again took possession of her”

“She twisted and squirmed, kicked and clawed. But she was helpless”