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Mimi's Insanity--Bell out of Order, Please Knock!
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Michelle
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Mar 28, 2009 01:36PM
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*sigh* done with new chapter... i dont like this one... but i promise it'll get better later...http://www.goodreads.com/story/show/3...
yay now i dont look like an idiot dancing by myself! lolz
I know you're here. I better start on that review..
ProlougueGood start, I suppose,
Chapter 1
Odd, but it seems like they enjoy torturing Anna, which is good they are her friends.
Chapter 2
I love the gypsy, and as I said the death scene is perfectly grotesque. yet oddly awesome. However her reaction is odd. She doesn't seem thrown for a loop.
Chapter 3
Chase first apears, I like him at this point. He seems like the one htat might tell her what's happening.
Chapter 4
Some good dialougue, nice planning of the party.
Chapter 5
More Chase complications
Chapter 6
Yada yada yada, Meets James and such..
Chapter 7
Beginning of hatred for Marina, she is annoying and seems to butt in EVERYWHERE!! More gypsy converstion.
Chapter 8
Okay, James at this point is a officially a stalker that won't shut up about gypsys.
I'm not even done yet. And so far I've been nice.
so youre, what? destroying my illusions that my writing is actually halfway decent? thanx a lot! *rolls eyes* are you satisfied now, that im fully aware of how much you hate my story, and that im not good at writing and i should just completely give up? im sick and tired of people analyzing every stupid move i make!! so back off and let me live with my broken illusions im peace
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I really like it Mimi, I don't post anything, but I think it's great! I've been keeping tabs on this story. This is one of the stories that I check and make sure there's no new chapters of every time I sign on.
So don't mock it, Marley!
Chapter 9
Marina is sticking her nose in stuff, I don't like it. But I suppose it is the little sis's job. And Katie is getting all, 'oohhh you like him' when it seems that Anna HATES him. However regardless it is good.
Chapter 10
Katie just left her alone with a boy 3 years older than her she barely knows.
Chapter 11
Chase seems like less of as asshole now. And at least they are talking, sorta. And then the crazy fuck James stolls in, and BLAH BLAH BLAH, how is this not creeping her out. AND THEN she gives in...finally.
Chapter 12
I like the ending line.... At least it hints that she doesn't despise him, like her actions have hinted at.
Chapter 13
Yay, some good gossip, I really want Anna to snap. That's cuz all my charecters are drama queens
Chapter 14
CRAZY ROMANCE!! finally...
I'M NOT MOCKING, IT'S GOOD. I'm COMMENTING ONTHE ACTION OF THE STORY!! I'm just a different writer!!
your comments are implying that you dont like the story. do you read what you post?
Yes I do, and I'm saying it's good. And which chapters and charecters I like.
True, but maybe I'll learn to, there's a reason for you to keep writing.
What's not helping. I'm saying if you firther develop your charecters I may love them. Perhaps I need to wait. In any case continue writing, because maybe I'll stop hating stalker dude.
mthinks thats like the only thing im good at...
That's not true, you also... well you can... well not that, but you... Ummm....Don't you...Well you're part of... Can you knit.. I'm not..., Well..YEAH, that's about it.
HAH thats what i thought!! I WIN!!!
Yeah, you win, You fail at life, congradulations.
*bows in mock grandeur* told you so
*claps* Congrats, you are oficially the worst human ever, you have no skills or thoughts, in fact you can't ewven be human.
okay, now youre twisting it mercilessly...
well, thats your fault, no? so go flip a coin or something! *storms off*
No, it's your fault. *flips penny into Mimi's eye*
Why are you scared. *aproaches leaving a shadow on the dark wall, takes out knife*
wow, marley, way to up the dramatics...
*picks at her teeth with knife&* What are you looking at, I don't understand I'm not here to hurt you. *stabs Mimi*
Oh Mimi, lookie here, I KNOW you never look at my topic so this is for you... tell me, I'mgiving you a chance to be a critic like me...http://www.goodreads.com/story/show/3...
Have fun!
