I suppose you read the title... My work isn't all that good, so I came here.
1. I really want to get a good english grade, so guys! Tell me what you think of the following. I have to write an almost fanfiction-like account of Red Dog's second visit to Perth. Have any of you seen the movie or read the book? If you have seen/read either, you would know what this next paragraph is. Could any readers please tell me what you think, how I could improve, etc? Obviously this is only a small part of the whole. ~
The red dog watches the dusty horizon on the outskirts of Perth. The road he is residing on for the moment is equally dusty, well-worn and patched. The bitumen is old and the tar seems to be melting in the midday sun. The road is a long snake leading to the city of Perth in one direction, and central Australia from the other. There are no side lanes. No detours. No other ways to go. But the red dog didn’t stick to the road. He roamed wherever, with one soul purpose. One question. Have you seen John?
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I really want to get a good english grade, so guys! Tell me what you think of the following. I have to write an almost fanfiction-like account of Red Dog's second visit to Perth. Have any of you seen the movie or read the book? If you have seen/read either, you would know what this next paragraph is. Could any readers please tell me what you think, how I could improve, etc? Obviously this is only a small part of the whole. ~
The red dog watches the dusty horizon on the outskirts of Perth. The road he is residing on for the moment is equally dusty, well-worn and patched. The bitumen is old and the tar seems to be melting in the midday sun.
The road is a long snake leading to the city of Perth in one direction, and central Australia from the other. There are no side lanes. No detours. No other ways to go. But the red dog didn’t stick to the road. He roamed wherever, with one soul purpose. One question.
Have you seen John?