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February 11, 2012: Free write Promt (number two)
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Dear Irene,I know that it is past February but i thought it would be a good idea as practise to take some time and have a go at some of the other poetry challenges that i have not attempted. Here is my attempt at this particular challenge, although on reflection i personally feel that it could be more fluid.
Moss and Fungi adorn the rough, scaly bark,
Presenting a visage of speckled Eggs with broken shells,
Jagged cracks show the history that is written there,
Memories of past ages, of sorrow and pain,
Rings of age spiraling outwards, expanding,
A gentle breeze rustles through moist foliage,
Twigs snapping, crackling detaching themselves,
Years pass ever eternal with each unrelenting hour,
Demise will come swift as the new sun rises,
Acorns promise regeneration and the new foundations of the earth,
Lucinda wrote: "Dear Irene,I know that it is past February but i thought it would be a good idea as practise to take some time and have a go at some of the other poetry challenges that i have not attempted. Here ..."
It's okay, the prompts are always open :)
It is very nicely done in description I would just work on fluidity as you pointed out.
-Irene
-Large welcoming branches reach for the sky, nearly embracing the cotton candy clouds. A sturdy rough trunk supports the wide embrace of branches that hold luscious foliage in the summer and dry brilliant leaves in the fall. The grassy knoll it perches on provides a great shaded place in summer months for frolicking children. Its wide flat branches are perfect resting spots for avid readers as the other long thick tendrils curl around you like a loving parent to keep you safe. The elongated hollow at the wide base with a dark interior provides a perfect hiding spot when a game of hide and seek ensues. In late winter when snow crests its open arms its shadow graces the slick snow covered hill, like the watchful eye of a protective parent.