new story - where is it going?

[[deleted user]]

I'm not sure where this thing is going. It's just a scene that I think is pretty good. I don't know what the plot is or anything. Advice, please?

Here's the link: http://www.goodreads.com/story/show/3....

[adi]

i like it!

[Sella, ov vey! i haven't checked this group in months. ><]

me too!! :D

[Paige]

yes! YOU USED THE DOTS!!!! HALLEJUAH!!!!!!!

[[deleted user]]

I can't read it. It's doing that weird thing where it links to my writing.

[Paige]

♥♫Fiona♫♥ wrote: "I can't read it. It's doing that weird thing where it links to my writing."

ME TOO! I want to, but I can't. : (

[[deleted user]]

yeah. i deleted it, it wasn't too good. but i have another romance story (i know it says lit and fiction i have to change it) and here's the link: http://www.goodreads.com/story/show/3...

[[deleted user]]

ps: if it goes to your writing, there will be a sign that says in red: Oops, we couldn't find that story.

[[deleted user]]

aaaaah! i see it...

[[deleted user]]

yay

[Paige]

It's very good. I found a few typo's, but I liked it. : ) I love the way you jumped right into the story

[[deleted user]]

thanks! sorry for the typo's.. if you can comment to tell me what was mispelled that would be much appreciated!

[Paige]

Adrienne wrote: "thanks! sorry for the typo's.. if you can comment to tell me what was mispelled that would be much appreciated!"

Okay, give me one sec and I'll come back and tell ya.

[Paige]

okay here's one. Paragraph one, chapter one

"The first thing is to except something is wrong! I am wrong! And I intend to be wrong."

Should be A-C-C-E-P-T, not E-X-C-E-P-T. Homophones : )

[[deleted user]]

thanks! *corrects dumb word*

[Riley]

I know. Homophones suck.

[[deleted user]]

the english language is STUPID. i dont give a damn if its the right word or not. people know what i mean, right?!

[Brigid ✩]

gah english is really stupid

[[deleted user]]

i know seriously!

[Brigid ✩]

so many rules. @$#@$#%$#%#$%#$@%#$% gaaaahhhh
have you ever had to diagram sentences? we have to do it in english class and it's so freaking annoying. i want to bang my head against a wall!!!

[[deleted user]]

no haha i feel luky

[Brigid ✩]

ugh you ARE lucky.
here's an example of what a diagrammed sentence can look like ...



AAAAGH!!! -brain explodes-

[Riley]

*feebly* Oh. *brain explodes*

[Veronica, What the neck!?]

uh, I don't really get all of it. I think I get the second part though...

The reader must enter into all this before he can comprehend the unimaginable horror

[Riley]

I still don't get it.

[Paige]

I think it's this:

These dreams of oriental imagery and mythological tortures impressed upon me which the reader must enter into all this before he can comprehend the unimaginable horror.

I could be totally wrong though... we're learning this in school right now.

[Brigid ✩]

O.o gaaahhhh

[[deleted user]]

ooh i feel bad 4 u!

[Paige]

did i get it right, Brigid????

I feel bad for me too..... BUT NOW I'M ON CHRISTMAS BREAK!!!!!!!! YAY!!!!!!!!

[Brigid ✩]

oh i have no idea. i just picked a random diagram; i have no idea what it says. lolz

[Paige]

oh. well darn, now its going to torment me.

[Sella, ov vey! i haven't checked this group in months. ><]

aaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh!!!!! brigid you're making my brain explode!!!!!!!!! noooooooooooo!!!!!!!!!!!

english is soo stupid. so is spelling. :P

[Riley]

Meh, spelling's okay.

[Xerxes Break(Vivian Ephona)]

I HATE DIAGRAMMING SENTENCES! I HAD TO DO IT IN 6TH GRADE!

[Massie]

i love the romance one

[Paige]

WHAT???????????