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Week 109- (Jan 21st-28th) Stories--- Topic: Seduction DONE!
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Jan 26, 2012 05:34PM
I had to learn IPA transcription when I was a sophomore and took the History of the English Language class. After that, I wrote my poems and stories in IPA, which most teachers and other students couldn’t read, and which doesn’t look anything like ordinary handwriting. I wrote them in the same notebooks I took lecture notes in, but I took notes in longhand. When I crammed, I just read what was in longhand.
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I liked it.... Yeah, not much else to say. Sorry.
I will get to the other three eventually. My new friend, Ashley just gave me some feedback on Mary today. I'm going to see what I can do...And I keep thinking why red lines keep appearing below my words; I forgot-I put my spell checker on Spanish. XD
Okay, edited mine. The italics are places I want opinions on, please.
Thanks, Edward! I write strictly for fun, so that you liked it is the response I was going for. I appreciate your having read it.At first, I was going to use the story to explore Jung’s idea of anima, which was why I brought the old library, with its reflecting windows, into it. About halfway through the story, I abandoned that idea and changed up their conversation to explore Berne’s concept of psychological games. I gave up on that idea, but left what I had already written. I had planned to do a scene at the end between Roy and Lori, at Roy’s apartment, but I didn’t know how well I could write it, and the story seemed stronger if I left their immediate future to the reader’s imagination.
I have no idea how to get more into it.
It doesn't seem like a scene to me because there is nothing important to say after the memory. The bus ride was just something random; a quiet day between jobs...
I had thought of something while doing dishes, but according to Terry Brooks, since it didn't stay in my head when I was done, it probably wasn't very good....
Ever read Sometimes the Magic Works? Like I said, according to him, they probably weren't worth much. XDWhat do you think for a first attempt at a slightly erotic story? I know it needs some work, but...You said you liked it before I fixed, right? Just need to know so I don't drop writing, too. XD
If it's grammar, I ain't worried unless it's confusing. XD I thought only slightly erotic, but I don't know the genre well, so...XD
I actually enjoyed writing the first and the last paragraphs. Both his friends get mentioned in passing. lol
I couldn't think of anything else. As far as I can remember, though, I've only gotten positive reviews with suggestions and not one negative like I have with most of my others, so I'm happy with no votes. ^__^ I haven't gotten to anyone else's stories, except Al and Edward, yet...
Edward said it wasn't affecting...Maybe that's just him. He left his book bag on the bus, so he might not be on that much for the weekend at least. Hopefully he gets his computer back.
Poor Edward! I hope he gets his computer back. I’d be devastated.Temperament has a lot to do with how you respond to stories and poems, what you like to read.
He's going to the bus stop now to see if it's still on the bus. There's only one or two buses that run that route.
Thanks for informing everyone, soror.[/sarcasm]I think I just have to be impressed by characters to really care about vampire stories. I'm prejudiced against them, even though I like Angel.
This heavy laden week is almost over. How often do we spill into four pages?
By the way, a good alternative for wiggled is squirmed, as long as you add a positive adjective to it like ... "delightedly." There are few subsitutes for giggle, since it is a very certain type of laugh. "Giggled again" might help a little.
I didn't use giggled before. Squirmed could work.
Like I said, couldn't think of anything else at the time. And I didn't want to go get the thesaurus. XDCrap. I just remembered I have Russian homework. Can't fix the story any more now. Oh, well. I'll fix it when the contest is over.
If the number of posts is any indication, this has been the most popular of unpopular topics so far in the W.S.S. story competitions. Even the best of weeks haven’t been remotely as busy as this one, and an ordinary week has only a fraction of the posts.When I read Saira’s story (#119), the description seemed almost documentary to me. My immediate thought was, “This is a certainly a mature thing for someone in the W.S.S. to write.” The description was sparse and repetitive but remarkly close to the bullseye.
Thank you, M. I'm still happy with it at the moment. :)
Extremely bored. I'm going to go write some stories using some of the previous themes here. I saw coffee, fighting and full moon. SO wish I had been writing for those! XD
Can't wait to see next week's (tomorrow's) subject.
Wow, so many to choose from! I think I'll start with reflections. I can't wait, either.
Bored? Saira! What comes of boredom but literature for the libido? To be bored is to be bored with oneself.
Alex, if you had said that when all this got started, it might have changed the entire direction of the group. If you’re bored and have nothing else to do, log on to the W.S.S.
I actually had to do homework, but languages come so easy and I was tired, so I was bored. I have a whole bunch of ideas now, so I shouldn't be bored for a while. XD
Alex, did you take your story down? I’ve been skimming the thread but I can’t find it.
Yeah, she took it down. I remember because hers was the first two posts on page three.
Kat wrote: “Aw, why Al!”My reaction exactly.
We thought it was cheesy - that doesn't mean we didn't like it. Monty Python is cheesy."Bring out the holy hand gernade!"
Oh my golly jeeps! This discussion had 207 new posts... Lol.
But, I wanna... :( I'm your SISTER.
You make me sad.And thanks! I love Hamlet! :D Especially that particular part in the movie/book.
I read the rewrite. I just didn't say anything. XD
There is no purge button for my memory XD
I wonder if that page is still saved in my history. I can copy it...XD
LOL Just kidding. my browser doesn't (or isn't) supposed to save much of my history. XD
Mine does....
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But I won't use it.
Now I’m really glad I took down my critique of “Sting.” Imagine what Hannah would have thought of that!
Hannah, here’s the synopsis. Frank goes to Al’s apartment, drugs her, takes her to his penthouse, and tries to assault her, but he doesn’t get very far before Al pulls a water pistol on him. The story is mostly dialog. At the end, Al walks out and Putnam jumps from his balcony.
I got the Reader’s Digest version?
