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Isabel wrote: "Can we do our entry here?"Yep
Valencia, if you are submitting to win than you can't judge (sorry)
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Irene wrote: "Our first writting competition will be a word list challenge. This means you must use all of the words below, at least once, in the order they appear on the list. You can NOT change the words in a..."
[By the way I had to highlight the words in capitals because I was unable to make the words bold or italic]
As her long white hair- so BEAUTIFUL and PERFECT in every way even though it has the resemberlence of ice. I guess she reminds me of ice, hard all the way through until she melts - sways as she walks towards the lodge. A place which serves the most luxurious and TASTY food i've tasted in my whole immortal life. She doesn't realise it yet, that she is immortal too. I will tell her soon. She has never met me, probably doesn't even know I exsist. I've been watching her for three months now. She has never noticed me following her, but I guess it's pretty hard in the dark. The only source of light is from the moon. MOONLIGHT. It's as white and ICY as SNOW. Every so often I have to enter her mind to see what she is thinking, to make sure she hasn't spotted me. -She hasn't by the way.- I hear LAUGHTER in the distance, we must be getting closer to the lodge.
She must be freezing COLD tonight in just her SILKY red dress wearing no coat or hat. Her dress bounces as she makes her way around the corner- her usual route. Past the TREES and into the street. - I'm not surprised to walk around the corner and notice a GREY haired man with a DOG greating her as she comes closer to him. I'm peaking over the FENCE now so she does not see me spying on her. I'm surprised her father hasn't told her about her powers yet. She must be beguining to notice, afterall she has just turned sixteen. The age they name the beguinning. I quickly glance at my watch. Eleven o'clock it reads. I look up again and I am suddenly hurled with an unusual feeling, something amoung uneaseness or fear. I can't find her, where is she? Where is Amenesa?
"She's here Immortal.." says a deep male voice from behind.
I pause. Slowly I turn around. He's right- she is there. Standing behind me is the girl with the white hair- Amenesa- and her father. He girns at me, not one of those nice smiles, a horrible menacing one. That's when I notice his teeth. Thangs! I was wrong, she's not just Immortal, she's more than that. She's a vampire! She's DANGEROUS!
"Daddy." She says. "I think it's time we find out who this boy is..."
[By the way I had to highlight the words in capitals because I was unable to make the words bold or italic]
As her long white hair- so BEAUTIFUL and PERFECT in every way even though it has the resemberlence of ice. I guess she reminds me of ice, hard all the way through until she melts - sways as she walks towards the lodge. A place which serves the most luxurious and TASTY food i've tasted in my whole immortal life. She doesn't realise it yet, that she is immortal too. I will tell her soon. She has never met me, probably doesn't even know I exsist. I've been watching her for three months now. She has never noticed me following her, but I guess it's pretty hard in the dark. The only source of light is from the moon. MOONLIGHT. It's as white and ICY as SNOW. Every so often I have to enter her mind to see what she is thinking, to make sure she hasn't spotted me. -She hasn't by the way.- I hear LAUGHTER in the distance, we must be getting closer to the lodge.
She must be freezing COLD tonight in just her SILKY red dress wearing no coat or hat. Her dress bounces as she makes her way around the corner- her usual route. Past the TREES and into the street. - I'm not surprised to walk around the corner and notice a GREY haired man with a DOG greating her as she comes closer to him. I'm peaking over the FENCE now so she does not see me spying on her. I'm surprised her father hasn't told her about her powers yet. She must be beguining to notice, afterall she has just turned sixteen. The age they name the beguinning. I quickly glance at my watch. Eleven o'clock it reads. I look up again and I am suddenly hurled with an unusual feeling, something amoung uneaseness or fear. I can't find her, where is she? Where is Amenesa?
"She's here Immortal.." says a deep male voice from behind.
I pause. Slowly I turn around. He's right- she is there. Standing behind me is the girl with the white hair- Amenesa- and her father. He girns at me, not one of those nice smiles, a horrible menacing one. That's when I notice his teeth. Thangs! I was wrong, she's not just Immortal, she's more than that. She's a vampire! She's DANGEROUS!
"Daddy." She says. "I think it's time we find out who this boy is..."
It wouldn't let me bold it, so I just put spaces between the words and the rest of the story, is that ok?
Since I can't bold the words, I hope putting the words in all caps is okay. =^-^= But...my story is a little longer than I thought it would be...I got a little carried away. THE MAGICALNESS OF INSPIRATIONS!!!!!!!This is a true story.
Here it goes!
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I've been in love. I wasn't really that experienced when it happened. I didn't know how DANGEROUS it was back then.
I know now that before I fell for him, my heart was solid. It wasn't exactly PERFECT. It ached whenever I bickered with my friends or when I got scolded for sneaking a cookie out of the cookie jar. I mean, I felt totally defeated when I realized that my friends were the right ones and that they were meant to win our arguments. And as for the cookie jacking incidents, I just couldn't resist the temptation to shove the TASTY pastries into my mouth. Even though my parents couldn't do anything about the cookies after I ate them, they could still scream pretty loudly. My heart definitely ached when I watched the cookie jar being moved to a higher shelf.
But these were little things. My heart was naive. Sure, I'd think that being defeated by your own friends would make a pretty bad impact and it would usher out a few tears. But this was nothing compared to what falling in love did to me. I wasn't prepared. I was weak. Stupid.
The thin FENCE that had circled around my feelings opened up wider than it had for anyone. He unknowingly came in. His face, his voice, his lies were all messing me up. I didn't realize any of the effects until salty tears poured out of my eyes every night. I blamed him for all of the little patches of dried-up tears across the SILKY pillow I got from my dad as a present.
I blamed him for many more things besides a tear-stained pillow. I'm sure none of my tears would have spilled if love never walked through my heart. It was amazing what one person could do to another, even if the moment it happened was when I was really young.
I was in the 6th grade when he transferred into my reading class. He reminded me of a lost DOG. His eyes were looking up at the staring faces of his new classmates, including mine. He was frowning. I figured that maybe he had friends in the class he transferred from. I felt a little sorry for the guy because this particular class was full of talkative gorillas. I really didn't have friends in this class either.
I figured out his name. My best friend told me that she knew the guy since kindergarten, and he had a taunting nickname. It shrivels up my insides to mention this nickname, so I'll just keep it unknown for now. But in 6th grade, I knew nothing about the nickname and I was naive, so I said his nickname freely without becoming as hurt.
He shot an ICY glare at me. His eyes reminded me of caramel, which I loved when it was served warm with a plate of apple slices. It was peculiar how such an eye color could look so COLD and chilly and frozen.
He told me to go away.
It wasn't my idea version of the first exchanged words. In 7th grade, when he ended up in my guitar class, I reminded him of these words. I learned that he was probably in a crabby mood that day. He was always sleepy in that class. He was always sleepy in every class.
This explained his annoyed eyes and his frown. I didn't blame him anymore when he explained the situation to me in the next school year. My little brother told me I reminded him of Medusa when he woke me up four hours too early on a Saturday.
Anyway, back then, his first words to me shot through my ears. I remember exactly what I was thinking.
"Jerk!"
But I didn't tell him this out loud. Instead, I stormed away. I didn't think he was worth my time.
I was no fortune teller. I never expected to fall for him.
In the 7th grade, he was different.
His caramel-colored eyes glinted when he laughed. Somehow, his loud LAUGHTER was contagious to me. I felt stupid crying and laughing at the same time when he laughed at my reddened face.
I was starting to notice more qualities about him that made me happy. I remembered well that he only had about an inch of hair, but it ruffled in the wind along with the surrounding TREES that lined the courtyard after lunch. He laughed even louder when he told me that there were leaves caught in my hair because of that wind. He made jokes as he peeled the stuff out of my hair.
Somehow, through the laughter and smiles we exchanged, he became my best guy friend.
And I loved him. And he told me--with struggling--that he loved me too.
What a cruel lie to tell.
I didn't know what happened in the 8th grade. His smile and laughter looked and sounded different. I asked him questions. I asked him what went wrong. And I found answers that I didn't want.
He was a liar. That confession was all a lie. He claimed that he was trying to be nice and he tried to concern my feelings, but these were lies, too. I could tell.
He painted my world GREY.
I chased after him, asking even more questions. Why did he lie? Why did he respond to my confession with the same answer? Why? Why?
And his face went pale. I saw his darkened eyes when he turned around. I saw his face as white as purely fallen SNOW. I saw his teeth grit. I saw his arm lunge towards my stomach.
The rest, I didn't see. My vision blurred away when I collided with the hard wall beside me. I felt my body fall onto the concrete. I heard people calling out my name.
When I came to, I saw him standing in front of the crowd that surrounded me. A lady was helping me onto my knees.
"Who pushed you? What happened? Are you hurt?" she asked.
"I'm fine."
I lied.
"Did someone push you?"
I glanced up at him through my watery eyes. He gave me a stare. It was an emotionless, silent stare. He frowned.
I go back to what I was saying before. He was in my heart. He had messed me up.
I know that if I had common sense and I wasn't messed up, I would have turned him in without a second thought.
But I did not have common sense.
I was messed up.
I was in love.
I hurried onto my feet, trying to show that I was fine when I wasn't. "I fell on my own."
I lied.
8th grade ended fast. We separated into different high schools. I wasn't exactly shocked to find him at the choir concert at our old middle school last winter.
I wasn't shocked to see him hand-in-hand with another girl. For some odd reason, I couldn't see her face. It was night time, but her face seemed blurred out.
I was sure she was BEAUTIFUL. She was beautiful, being in love and having that feeling truly returned. She probably had no false hopes.
I hoped that if he was ever in the risk of trouble, she would step in for him in my place.
That was the last time I saw him. That was the last time the same MOONLIGHT shone above our heads.
I fell in love. I didn't know how dangerous it was. I didn't know falling in love could make me lie the way I did.
Falling in love can be terrible, huh? It opens your heart up. It lets something get inside you and mess you up.
Erika wrote: "It wouldn't let me bold it, so I just put spaces between the words and the rest of the story, is that ok?"Yes, of coures, thank-you for telling me.
Thanks for all the stories! Glad you all seem to likt this, remember to submit before saturday :)
The night was hauntingly BEAUTIFUL. Her blood smelled so TASTY it was intoxicating. “I love you,” were the last words uttered from her COLD lips as her body froze in my arms. The MOONLIGHT shone down on us through the TREES as I caressed her limp body. She had stolen away to the woods to meet me this night. Despite the SNOW blanketing the earth, we had chosen this night to leave. No other night was more PERFECT than this one. The ground was covered in a blanket of SILKY, soft snow, and I stood in the light flurry as I waited for her.
“It’s DANGEROUS to be in woods alone, isn’t it?” A creepy, snake-like voice whispered. She stopped at the FENCE we had agreed to meet at, staring up in shock. Somehow, she had miscalculated where she was headed and was a few feet to the right of me.
“I’m not alone!” she yelled.
I raced to her side to investigate the threat. She let out a yelp of surprise as I appeared next to her. When her eyes recognized my features her shoulders relaxed and she let out a sigh of relief.
“It appears you’re not.” The voice expressed displeasure at my appearance.
“You’re right to leave.” I barked. The night sky suddenly turned dark and GREY as his hysterical LAUGHTER rose through the air. I heard a rustling of the leaves then saw a DOG – his dog, I assumed – jump over the wooden fence. Its eyes glared at us – no, at her. I could see the hunger laced through his ICY stare. When the dog lunged, I reacted and threw my body in front of hers. I expected to feels teeth or claws in my skin, but I all I felt was the shriek of a scream reverberating through my ears.
I let out a holler as I jumped on the dog, but it was too late. A cackle rose into the night sky as the dog howled at his victory. The thick smell of her blood pooling under her made me dizzy, and I couldn’t see straight as I threw a wild punch. When I finally got a hold of my senses, all I saw was mist as the man and his dog disappeared.
“I love you, too.” I whispered. I held her body for what felt like days, but was probably only a few hours. Our night, and my life, were destroyed.
“It’s DANGEROUS to be in woods alone, isn’t it?” A creepy, snake-like voice whispered. She stopped at the FENCE we had agreed to meet at, staring up in shock. Somehow, she had miscalculated where she was headed and was a few feet to the right of me.
“I’m not alone!” she yelled.
I raced to her side to investigate the threat. She let out a yelp of surprise as I appeared next to her. When her eyes recognized my features her shoulders relaxed and she let out a sigh of relief.
“It appears you’re not.” The voice expressed displeasure at my appearance.
“You’re right to leave.” I barked. The night sky suddenly turned dark and GREY as his hysterical LAUGHTER rose through the air. I heard a rustling of the leaves then saw a DOG – his dog, I assumed – jump over the wooden fence. Its eyes glared at us – no, at her. I could see the hunger laced through his ICY stare. When the dog lunged, I reacted and threw my body in front of hers. I expected to feels teeth or claws in my skin, but I all I felt was the shriek of a scream reverberating through my ears.
I let out a holler as I jumped on the dog, but it was too late. A cackle rose into the night sky as the dog howled at his victory. The thick smell of her blood pooling under her made me dizzy, and I couldn’t see straight as I threw a wild punch. When I finally got a hold of my senses, all I saw was mist as the man and his dog disappeared.
“I love you, too.” I whispered. I held her body for what felt like days, but was probably only a few hours. Our night, and my life, were destroyed.
Thank-you for all your submissions! Results will be up soon.
First off, thank you all for participating but next time please read the directions very very carefully. Due to disqualifications there is only enough for first and second placers. They were all very good but due to not using the words as listed in that order many entries were disqualified (that is probably my fault since it wasn't super clear, which I will make sure to do next time). So thank-you all for participating, I enjoyed reading them all and now here are the results:1st place: Wednesday
2nd place: Rebecca
Congrats to you two! And thanks again to everyone for participating!
OHHHH we had to use them IN ORDER...Sorry, I didn't catch that part...>_< Ah well...yes, there shall be another writing competition, right?
Theresa ♥ wrote: "OHHHH we had to use them IN ORDER...Sorry, I didn't catch that part...>_< Ah well...yes, there shall be another writing competition, right?"
Yep, and yes. There will be another competition.
Rishika wrote: "when? can i be in?"Probably late this month or early February. What do you mean by in?
Yes, it is open to all group members, you just have to complete it before the set deadline.
alrite will do........ will be waiting for the contest
Thanks Irene :DOh and congrats to the 1st and 2nd placers, YAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAY!!! (*Theresa jumps up and down like a crazy monkey*)
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List of words:
Beautiful
Tasty
Cold
Moonlight
Trees
Snow
Perfect
Silky
Dangerous
Fence
Grey
Laughter
Dog
Icy