Please read this and tell me everything (good and BAD) you think about it. Do you like it? Do you hate it? Every thought that goes through your mind about this, I want to know. It's the first chapter to a book I'm writing called Something Else Entirely and I really need feedback. If you want me to post more, I have 10 more chapters :) Thanks
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