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I went on a 3hour long drive so decided to write in that time.. It's early but posting it now while I remember. Comments and Feedback welcome! How is it compared to the first writing prompt?http://www.goodreads.com/story/show/2...
I got on a role and couldn't stop. I wrote three chapters... yikes! I hope it's worth the time reading... uh... (don't worry, two of them were hanging in limbo on my computer already so I modified them to fit. Better they get some audience than none at all.)
Please don't hurt me too badly. Hope It's not too embarrasing
http://www.goodreads.com/story/list/5...
Of course, just after posting, I had to go back and do another round of edits. I really did pass English enough to graduate from High School. I promise. Regardless of what it looks like on the story threads.
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@ Hugh, Embarrasing?! Certainly not!! it was great.
You are both trying to make my story look bad ;)
I must go re-edit now....
(might get it up tonight)
yea, but I blew the last date. I put 1988, it should have been 1888. What good are historical event/name droping techniques if you get the dates wrong?
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All ready done. (Sigh) I'm becoming adept at the high speed emergency edit.
I kinda cheated after I wrote it and put it in Word to see if there were any mistakes. Surprised there was only one :PNot trying to make your story look bad Linda! Mine's not even that good
If that's cheating, then I'm a cheater. I wrote mine in MS Word, and it still had a lot of mistakes. I liked your story very much and I can't wait to read Linda's. I'm sure your both better at this than me.
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And here is chapter one of Jennica:
http://www.goodreads.com/story/show/2...
I've just started reading it, and I have a hint. (I learned the hard way) If your writing in word, then cutting and pasting it to Goodreads, you need to double enter between paragraphs. That will keep the paragraphs separate. If you write it double spaced it's still a double enter.
I haven't figured out how to get it to recognize tabs yet, but I'm working on it.
Linda wrote: "Hmm, great minds think alike, I wrote mine in word too! And here is chapter one of Jennica:
http://www.goodreads.com/story/show/2..."
I read it and think it's wonderful. My daughter might like to read it ... in a year or two. (She's six).
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Yeah, I really need to remember that :)
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And here is chapter one of Jennica:
http://www.goodreads.com/story/show/2..."
I read it and think it's wonderfu..."
I'm writing it for a friend of mine who's 13 so I did want to keep it kid-friendly but so far my ideas for the 2nd chapter would have to br toned down a lot to keep that up.
Me too. I still have to go back in and add a space to separate paragraphs now and then. I also learned that you can put the html tags you know italics, underline etc straight in the MS Word Text, and they'll work when you cut and paste them for the post. We got a chapter 2 coming? (nevermind... I see you answered that whilst I posted.
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Oh yes, probably going to be a 5 chapter story.
You interested in another write-a-long?
Yes, unless you'd rather me write a chapter 4 on my thread? LOL... well, I could do another one and another chapter.
Interested yes.
(Time always gets in my way. Never enough of it. But I like to write when I can.)
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Had thought about that... I'll write as I get time. I got lucky last week. I may not get so lucky this week, but, what ever time I get, I'll try to post either a chapt 4, or a new write along prompt (on a prompt, not the prompt) or both, if they happen to work together then, cool... I'll go for it.
I can always cheat and dust off my infamous "Battle Faires" posts, for five quick chapters....heh... just as high schoolish as my posts on the write along, but, I've been told, fun.One of these days I'll get enough of a handle on the english language to sound intelligent.
Yes, let's do another write-a-long! I'm loving these :) they're fun. The first one was fun as well.
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Great! Well this one is still on through tomorrow (I think, I better check) and then I'll start another one :)
Awesome! I can't wait to see what the prompt is! oh and can you make it a difficult one to see what we all come up with? I'd like a challenge
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You got it!
I loved this prompt. I wish I would have had the time to participate.
ME too. The more people who post, the less likely I'll stand out like the villiage idiot on this thread.
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Thanks to all those that participated and I hope to see even more stories for our next one.
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7:47
As Ann entered the café, the wind blew a piece of paper off a patron's table and carried it out the door. She pushes past you but is unable to grab it before it goes down a storm drain. When she returns, she looks at you and says, "You've just killed me."?
Wendy did not believe in coincidences, she looked at the hospital clock and passed out.
It was only 12 months later that she responded to the unusual advert in the paper:
“If you like computers, single Female Office Assistant wanted, cheap, unsociable hours, call Matt and Greg on ......”
It sounded like a badly constructed advert for a porn film star. Although not that desperate she needed a job to change her life around and she called anyway. The voice on the end of the phone sounded disconnected from reality and asked her to come at quarter to eight in the evening. Even the address sounded dodgy, a basement flat below a shop.
She rang the half constructed bell not expecting too much success. Greg opened the door, bringing into life a computer nerd wearing a coffee stained t-shirt with ‘Saxon’ scrawled in it. Come in, we did not know if you anyone would come. The kitchens on the left 4 black coffees, and whatever you’re having – we are in the back room. They still did not know her name.
Wendy seemed perplexed as she entered the kitchen, she almost jumped when the music got turned on, it was ‘747 (Strangers in the night), her watch read 7:47, she did not believe in coincidences.
A decade later, Wendy co-authored with the boys, one of the company’s most successful online elimination games called “Deepest Fear”. Online games were just coming into vogue. The objective was to hide you ‘deepest fear’ within the game and seek to discover another avatar’s deepest fear before yours or kill them in an elimination contest. Defeated candidates were sent back to the chat room 747 until the next round commenced.
Over the years the game developed in complexity, even if the game’s idea remained the same. The company became so successful it introduced ‘Premier Weekends” and would often offer a prize, normally game credits for the winner.
Sophie had a rough time at the various kids home’s she grew up in, “Deepest Fear” was her escape and she often became champion. There was another winner just as frequent, middle aged wizard named ‘half soul’. But they had yet to meet online at the same event.
The company had offered a life changing prize of $250,000 for a worldwide pay off. Sophie had wanted it so badly, she wept when ‘half soul’ eliminated her in the final. 2 hours later as the evening wore on she walked into a nearby café inconsolable.
Ann did not need the money; her adopted parents had seen that she was alright in that respect. ‘Half soul’ her avatar was joyous and tomorrow was a special day, her parents had booked the entire place for the celebration. Needing some breathing space, she had wandered down from the 5 star hotel that evening and turned into a local cafe
As Ann entered the café, the wind blew a piece of paper off a patron's table and carried it out the door. She pushes past you but is unable to grab it before it goes down a storm drain. When she returns, she looks at you and says, "You've just killed me."?
Then recognition flared in her mind’s eye and Sophie froze as if having a stroke. A woman named Wendy, in her early thirties rose from an opposing table, and said ‘Happy Birthday”, Sophie and Ann said simultaneously ‘Mum?’. They both had been born that day in Perth at 7:47am, which was 12 hours ahead of New York.
Wendy cried, and they all hugged, even though they were strangers in the night. She recalled the inspiration for her Game ‘Deepest Fear’.
The spiritual woman whose house she had lived in when her parents had kicked out their pregnant 15 year old daughter, had sent her to hospital with the parting words ‘like Romulus & Remus, when these twins meet one will kill the other’. This was her deepest fear and she had made sure the twins were separated at birth and adopted separately in different countries.
But the death had occurred online, and life had taken a different path. The paper had said ‘Today you will meet half soul,’, and no one saw the older woman who had placed it on that table.
The clock’s battery had powered out when the door had opened, it was 7:47pm.
I like it Ice. Is there more?
It's more of an outline story which I conceived walking into work yesterday. Even so the 500 word limit was breached very early on. There is plently of gaps for better wordsmiths than me to fill in the timeline. Open source writing !!
LOL, there's a 500 word limit? I guess I blew that with mine... just a little bit..
You writing on write-along 3?
I am told by 'an eagle eye' that mine was 777 words long - so I need to cut out 30 !!Or am I writing in the style of airplanes? In which case 787, then dreamliner are the next titles.
I think I broke all limits, if there was a length issue. And LOL, the airplane theme. If you could write more than a couple to finish exactly on 747 that would have been really cool. It's not like I could pull that off.
(this was mine)
http://www.goodreads.com/story/show/2...
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As you enter a café, the wind blows a piece of paper off a patron's table and carries it out the door.
(S)He pushes past you but is unable to grab it before it goes down a storm drain. When he returns, he looks at you and says, "You've just killed me."? What was so important about the paper? What happens next?