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[Ajay]

Wonderful, Ryan and M! I'm loving this.

[M]

Thank you, Ajay!

[M]

Thanks, Alex. I’m going to write a poem this afternoon for the contest (I hope).

[Ryan]

Thanks, Alex. Thanks, Ajay. Welcome back, M and wow!

The dreams we once made
gone or decayed. Intricate
webs, so quickly frayed.

Oblivious world
still turning. My broken tears
lonesome and yearning.

Our hopes and our dreams,
once silvery streams. Dried now,
and littered with bones.

[Ryan]

I hope your world is looking brighter, Alex...

[Ajay]

Hi, Ryan! Your haiku saddens me, but I love it nonetheless!


A gust of wind hurls
the bones about. A solid
ray of orange arrives.

Piercing into raw earth,
it mates with the soil.
There springs new pulse.

[Guy]

HC, you guys! Thank you for your kind words, and more so, thank you for these amazing poems. Ryan, you made several M stanzas that were as close to perfection as possible. From so much too choose, but

Your flowery scent
once sweeter than wine. Soured
and no longer mine.

stands out.

Amazing. M, as usual, such vivid and real imagery.

A keen wind plucks the
last few leaves; gone now, the gifts
of a dry summer.

Ajay, this stanza stood out for me:

Reborn into diamonds,
they cater to crews of
necklines and egos.

These all are going to be tough to follow, but such a pleasure to read.

Sigh! I have been called away to attend to Christmas decorating detail. Will catch up later.

[M]

He sprang up full grown
at his birth, the new hero,
tall, the Golden One.

All knew his mother
was the earth, his father the
desert-making sun.

[M]

Don’t think of it as writing. Think of it as a counting exercise.

[M]

No. I was waiting up for my wife. She just got home from a medical society meeting.

Good night, pirates!

[Ryan]

Hi Ajay! How are you, mate? Ta for your comment and, even more, for taking the poem thread back to a positive place. Haha, I got caught up in the mood of it and couldn't seem to find my way out...very nicely done by you - that is some very strong writing. Your imagery blows me away constantly.

Guy - your monk moths made it into the poetry group finalists...that's two months in a row! Well done. Although I'm a bit annoyed as it means I have to stay a member for a bit longer to see if you win. I hate it there with the same passion that I love it here... As for comparing anything of mine to anything M has written-I appreciate the kind thought but....haha, not in this lifetime :)

M, once again I stand in awe. Your poetry is amazing and such a strong inspiration for me.

Al, I'm glad to hear you are feeling better. From a quick read of some of your new posts and group hugs, you definitely had some special coffee today. Great work!

[Ryan]

Ah, it must be the peppermint. Nice to hear a smile in your voice...ah, post...ah, typing ;D

[Ryan]

"Ouch!" cried Mother Earth
"I'm torn asunder. Hero,
I name thee Thunder."

[Guy]

Al, peppermint hot cocoa does not sound appealing at all. No accounting for taste.

Thanks Ryan. I confess to being surprised that it made it as a finalist because I don't remember ever seeing a Haiku finalist before. That I find particularly amusing and a little gratifying.

And as usual, I thank the WSS and its writers for inspiring me, because without it I wouldn't have written these things.

As to hating the poetry group... Hmmmmm. What to say? I haven't actively participated in it except to post entries and vote. Others who quit it wind up rejoining it every time someone whose writing they like gets shortlisted. So, be a passive-aggressive attendee.

I also, selfishly, find reading the entries to be an interesting exercise in poetical awareness. You see the trite efforts, the near misses, and the good stuff. I think, in a way, reading there is a good touchstone to your own growth as a writer.

And Ryan, your efforts are, truly, top notch. As I said before, even prodigious, as you seem to have taken to the form so easily, beautifully, and quickly.

[Guy]

@2659. Ryan, that is brilliant! Funny, great juxtaposition and continuity.

[Ryan]

Thanks, Guy - I had a chuckle, myself.

[Caitlan]

Al, that sounds so lovely.

[M]

Thunder terrorized
the moonlit earth, high astride
his stallion Lightning,

shouting oaths for all
he was worth. Field mice found him
thoroughly frightening.

[M]

I’ve succeeded! I’m glad you got a laugh out of it.

[M]

Naturally, they sent letters to their relatives on the pirate ship.

[Caitlan]

Of course XD

[Ajay]

Thank you, Guy! I'm glad you liked the one about the 'necklines and egos'!

Ryan, I'm doing great! Thank you, glad you liked the imagery. But I wish I'd written something dark as an extension to your's. But I've run out of stock.

Excellent extensions, M and Ryan! I like where this is heading. I'l try to come up with something as soon as I help myself to a cup of tea (if by chance my muse helps me with it).

[Ryan]

While I wait for your follow-up, Ajay, here is something banter-inspired...

Rat Beard the Captain,
scouring high seas. Following
his nose, hunting cheese.

A note blows in, his
friends in the field. Under siege,
not willing to yield.

Ship about, no room
for blunder. Off to battle
Lightning and Thunder.

[M]

Ryan, this is wonderful writing!

[Ajay]

I second M! Ryan, you are on a roll!

[Ryan]

Thanks, M. I don't know about 'great' but I'm certainly enjoying myself. This is easily my favorite thread now. I love seeing how so much thought and imagery can be pieced together so eloquently.

[M]

I’m still laughing about “Rat Beard the Captain.” This is very inventive, a saga in three haiku verses.

[Ryan]

Thanks, Ajay - I'm having a ball seeing how we all work off each other :)

[Caitlan]

Ryan, that's awesome :D I love your writing :D

[Ryan]

Thanks, Kat. And right back at you. I'm glad you're back :)

[Caitlan]

Aw, thanks :D I'm glad you joined :D

[Caitlan]

That's cause we just love you so much, we want to make you read a lot to exercise your brain XD

[M]

Rat Beard’s ship fired a
warning shot. Thunder almost
coughed up his box lunch,

and laughed and nearly
threw a clot: “It looks like the
ship on Cap’n Crunch!”

[Ajay]

Excellent, M!

[M]

Thank you, Ajay! Jump right in there.

[Ajay]

The mice men form a phalanx,
wrought with resolve.
Thunder's splendour's numbered.

Sorry, M. This one might be flawed.

[M]

Thunder watched, scratching
his head. The mice had little
flashlights on their shanks

as they approached. The
sun sank, deep red. The mice formed
a hop-light phalanx!

[M]

Okay, that was awful! It’s past my bedtime.

[Ajay]

No, M! I liked it! I'm having breakfast, I'l try to write a follow up soon.

[Caitlan]

I love seeing how far apart we are, how different our timezones are XD

[Ryan]

Haha, hop-light phalanx...I can't stop laughing, M. That's gold!

[Caitlan]

M is a comedian XD

[Ajay]

Kat wrote: "I love seeing how far apart we are, how different our timezones are XD"

Me too, Kat! I think that's a wonderful thing.

[Ajay]

Thank god, Ryan and Kat are here. Guys, it's your turn to write some haiku! Over to you :)

[Caitlan]

GASP. Okay. I'll do my best.


The light-butted mice
danced and jumped, flipping in the
air, dazzling the man

born out of the earth.
Thunder was so dazzled that
he fell on his butt.

[Ajay]

Ryan wrote: "Thanks, Ajay - I'm having a ball seeing how we all work off each other :)"

I couldn't agree more, Ryan. I think we've come to a stage wherein we would be able to recognize each other's poems even if they are being posted in an anonymous fashion.

[Ajay]

That rocked Kat! Very well done. I can't stop laughing!

[Caitlan]

OH, thanks, but I'm sure somebody else could have done better.

[Ajay]

Kat, your's is as good as anyone else's haiku!

[Caitlan]

Eh, not Guy's or M's. They're haiku masters XD I've only been doing it for the better part of a year.