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message 501: by M (new)

M | 11617 comments The black clock clattered
inside my head. I woke from
dreams that I was dead,

only to find, in
the harsh lamplight, that it was
just half past midnight.


message 502: by Jessica (new)

Jessica (eyrer) And once the shadows
drew into themselves as thin,
sun-weary limbs and

flesh, remaining days
grew full and round with chance tastes
of souls too ripened.


message 503: by M (last edited Mar 23, 2012 05:43PM) (new)

M | 11617 comments Jessica!


These were amber days
of thin, tempera shadows
and dappled evenings.


message 504: by Jessica (new)

Jessica (eyrer) Hi, guys! Yes, I'm back.

Another purpled
dusk fades past, leaving us in
arms worth fragile shades.


message 505: by Guy (new)

Guy (egajd) | 11249 comments Hellooooooooo Jessica! We've so missed you!
Hope all is well and what kept you from us was more fun than WSS — although I find that hard to imagine!

Nice Haiku!


message 506: by M (last edited Mar 23, 2012 06:12PM) (new)

M | 11617 comments Holding long purples,
she made me laugh as she leapt
from a serigraph.


message 507: by [deleted user] (new)

Ok i feel like an idiot but whats a Haiku?


message 508: by Guy (new)

Guy (egajd) | 11249 comments The shadows lengthen,
and my arms tighten in hope
for a sprightly night.


message 509: by Jessica (last edited Mar 23, 2012 06:17PM) (new)

Jessica (eyrer) Thank you, Guy. :)

Her nose: terrycloth
While her lips: inked impressions
Mere imprints of flesh

(er, this was in reply to M's--I was too slow!)


message 510: by M (new)

M | 11617 comments Jamie, for the purposes of this thread, haiku is verse that has three lines. The first and third lines have five syllables, and the second line has seven (5/7/5).


message 511: by Guy (last edited Mar 23, 2012 10:27PM) (new)

Guy (egajd) | 11249 comments No apology necessary, Al.

It just shows how excited we are at having Jessica back. I was just asking about you, Jessica, the other day.

Jamie, Haiku is a Japanese form. In general, it has been translated to mean, in English, a 3 line poem with a 5/7/5 syllabic/foot structure.

If you read through this thread you will see we WSSer play with the form with interlocking rhyming, playing off each others' poems, and in general having a great time with them. And not infrequently, there are even some excellent Haiku that are generated.

Jump in! It is a rather tough form to make work, but a truly creative exercise in making one's words count.


message 512: by [deleted user] (new)

sounds cool and way to complicated for my small mind :P maybe i well write one someday!


message 513: by Jessica (new)

Jessica (eyrer) Heh, thanks again, Guy; and thanks, Al! I was feeling rather silly when I wrote that one.


message 514: by Guy (new)

Guy (egajd) | 11249 comments Yeah they were funny, prancing around in a graveyard! Some of M's interleaved rhyming ones have been pretty much priceless too!


message 515: by M (new)

M | 11617 comments Guy is an artist
with haiku. For me, almost
any verse will do.


message 516: by Guy (new)

Guy (egajd) | 11249 comments M is the haiku
master, and our most modest
poetical pastor.


message 517: by M (last edited Mar 23, 2012 06:34PM) (new)

M | 11617 comments Thank you, Guy! You’re too kind.

(Reply to Jessica’s)

Ah, what lips--how pure,
how saintly, although rendered
in lipstick faintly!


message 518: by Jessica (new)

Jessica (eyrer) All of your poems
inspire within me great joy
and wistful envy.


message 519: by Guy (new)

Guy (egajd) | 11249 comments Jessica, I cannot imagine why you would feel silly. As always your poems are graceful and elegant and moving. This one fits in with that record quite nicely.

Again, it is great to see you back. :-)


message 520: by Guy (new)

Guy (egajd) | 11249 comments M, that is masterfully done. Brilliant!


message 521: by M (new)

M | 11617 comments Jessica, I think your writing is spectacular.


message 522: by Jessica (last edited Mar 23, 2012 06:37PM) (new)

Jessica (eyrer) I always feel silly and much too inadequate whenever I write--I don't feel like my poetry's anything special at all! But thank you, Guy. I appreciate your warm welcome. :)

M and Al-thank you, too! Gosh, you people. I don't know what to do with myself.


message 523: by M (last edited Mar 23, 2012 06:46PM) (new)

M | 11617 comments The pale moon pondered
what to do, so long before
his time to be blue.


message 524: by Jessica (new)

Jessica (eyrer) Al wrote: "Guy wrote: "M, that is masterfully done. Brilliant!"

Psh, and he says he isn't good at writing."


I agree with Al and Guy.


message 525: by M (new)

M | 11617 comments You were the one who brought up the moon.


message 526: by Guy (new)

Guy (egajd) | 11249 comments Yes, our too modest poetical pastor!


The bright moon laughed
at being made out to be
a pale shade of blue.

That is so untrue!
I blazon the sunlight
Although I am dead.


message 527: by M (last edited Mar 23, 2012 06:50PM) (new)

M | 11617 comments Oh, no! I’m out of turn.


“All eternity
is in that box,” he said, “but
I must go by clocks.”


message 528: by Guy (new)

Guy (egajd) | 11249 comments LoL! Al, you are so right! You made that association and I didn't even think of it, despite having blogged it.

(Still LoL.)

M. Al's referring to a series of weird blue colour 'encounters' that began with a friend who dreamt of a candle with a blue flame. It lead to a series of very odd blue encounters which I blogged. (They involved Jung and dream interpretation and were just odd.)


message 529: by M (new)

M | 11617 comments A candle with a blue flame. That seems like a clear symbol, if one only had the context of the dreams and the external life to make sense of it.


message 530: by M (last edited Mar 23, 2012 07:09PM) (new)

M | 11617 comments The candle sputtered.
Its wild, blue flame wordlessly
told his muse’s name.


message 531: by Guy (new)

Guy (egajd) | 11249 comments It involved a scary vampire and a large number of empty votive candle holders in a dark room.


message 532: by Guy (last edited Mar 23, 2012 10:30PM) (new)

Guy (egajd) | 11249 comments What was found inside
The box was a diminished
eternal tick tock.

And a hungry flame,
Looking to amuse a mage,
Stuttering sans words.


message 533: by Guy (last edited Mar 23, 2012 07:31PM) (new)

Guy (egajd) | 11249 comments I just went back to previous page, and I see lots of great Haiku I didn't know about! GR wasn't sending me notices. Bad GR. (I wonder why GR started sending the notice again with Jessica?! Oh frabjous day!)

So, a belated great verse, PushingReality34, Violet, Allison. What a weirdly morbid run. Al, did you get your fill? It was great fun to read.


message 534: by Jessica (new)

Jessica (eyrer) Guy wrote: "(I wonder why GR started sending the notice again with Jessica?! Oh frabjous day!)"

haha how odd


message 535: by M (new)

M | 11617 comments You’re funny. But, anyway . . .

He was soon in a
quandary, a natural
place for him to be.

Good morning, Alex!


message 536: by Guy (new)

Guy (egajd) | 11249 comments He squanders puzzles
The way others eat pizzas —
Drowning them with beer.


message 537: by Jessica (new)

Jessica (eyrer) His stomach expands
with nightly apologies,
swallows drenched in drink.


message 538: by Guy (last edited Mar 24, 2012 05:10PM) (new)

Guy (egajd) | 11249 comments Hi, Al, I'm sitting outside on my balcony in sunshine with my iPad. I'm listening to John Lee Hooker, one of my favourite musicians. But writing with it is actually quite hard.

And a haiku will, I am sure, pop into your head and out your fingers.

I've actually started a popcorn thread dialogue! We'll see if it will be good enough to get posted.


message 539: by Guy (last edited Mar 25, 2012 09:05PM) (new)

Guy (egajd) | 11249 comments The drunken swallow
Flew unsteadily into
The sot's beer belly.


message 540: by M (new)

M | 11617 comments It was a hard act
to follow, they all agreed.
Not to be outdone,

soon another one
dove for the belly button,
his flight blurred with speed.


message 541: by M (new)

M | 11617 comments I wrote a one-good-griefer! That's how I rate e-mail messages my wife reads, by how many times she says, "Oh, good grief!"


message 542: by M (new)

M | 11617 comments I have a feeling your pastor wouldn't appreciate some of the hymns I've rewritten.


message 543: by M (last edited Mar 26, 2012 02:39PM) (new)

M | 11617 comments He must be wired the way I am. I intensely dislike change. When my point-and-shoot camera wore out, I bought another one like it on eBay rather than have to get used to a new one.


message 544: by M (new)

M | 11617 comments Mine is, too, now.


message 545: by M (new)

M | 11617 comments Yeah, but mine usually goes really slow.


message 546: by M (new)

M | 11617 comments I don't know. I don't thing Guy's ever stops.


message 547: by M (new)

M | 11617 comments Where are you, Guy? I can't reply to my own haiku.


message 548: by M (new)

M | 11617 comments That happened to me, too! If you'll do the plot, I'll do the narration.


message 549: by Guy (last edited Mar 26, 2012 08:41PM) (new)

Guy (egajd) | 11249 comments Here I am! A busy night. Just finished supper, clean-up and food prep for the next few days.

Hey, Al, when did you put up the caution hyper-text window?! Yikes, that's something new and so I am want to not want it. LoL.

'Good Grief'?! I warranted a 'Good Grief'! Oh frabjous day, callooh callay!

But I'm not sure if my brain goes a mile a minute or not. Sometimes, I guess, but, then, sometimes not. Or maybe yes. Yikes. I've been trying to become more decisive, recently, to put my mind to it so to speak, but I find that I keep thinking about other things.

Like trying to keep up with M's haiku and stories, and Al's dialogues and stories.

Hmmm. What to write?


The impact sounded
Like a hammered tympani
With mild flatulence.

The belly belched
And the drunk birds flew away,
Seeking the circus.


message 550: by M (last edited Mar 27, 2012 05:52AM) (new)

M | 11617 comments The swallows’ drunk act
couldn’t seem to get off the
ground at the circus,

so they failed to re-
alize their dream of a posh
nest in a Quercus.

Their acrobatics
were complete with a plunge in-
to a milk carton,

but in the end, they
just couldn’t compete with Dean
and Mary Marten.


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