Something about it is bugging me, i can't put my finger on it.

[Angela]

...and I need a title...

I sit here in my chair and begin to melt. I start out slow and don't notice at all. Now I begin to realize, I'm creating puddles of swirling color all around me. I don't mind, I just watch and ponder. My feet are gone and my fingers are barely visable. I can feel all my life just flowing out of me as my whole body becomes a swirling pool of emotion, thought, and soul. I start to seep down into the floor boards. I begin to explore the innerworkings of my house. I slip through the cracks in the ceiling and onto the light fixtures. I drip into the living room and kitchen, exploring my suroundings as if they were new. I look behind me and discover a rainbow trail in my wake and continue on. My entire exisatnce seems useless now but I venture on in hopes of my perfect destination. I am now out on the deck and slipping away between the sturdy, white boards. I feel the moist soil beneath me. So this is what it feels like to be one with Mother Earth. I sink deeper and deeper into the ground. I am in pitch blackness for what seems like an eternity. I am scared. It is cold down here. Where am I going? This is what my soul has been longing for but why? How can I want what I do not even know of? I begin to see a welcoming red glow. Hotter and hotter, the wait is over. Thoughts rush through every bit of me. And then it stops. The world stops for a spilt second. It hits me. Absolute bliss. The core of my existance and the existance of everything I know, the Earth's Core. Heat consumes me and I thrive. Here I will reast in the bliss of life until you join me. I will wait for you to be ready, even if that's forever. I and in no hurry, I am in no hurry.

[Seth, The plan is simple--stay alive.]

Hmmm . . . maybe I could hear the rest before I say a title?

[Riley]

um...I know this will sound stupid, but it would be easier for me to read it if you put a space between each line. Or after each sentence, but that's what bugs me.

[Veronica, What the neck!?]

Yeah. Its just a block of text and isn't easy to read because of that.

But it was intriguing. It made me want to read more.

[Kenzie]

I don't mean to be critiquing your writing, but I think it would do you well to switch up the first word in the sentence. Reading 'I' over and over again bugs me. (just a little pet peeve)

BUT definitely an intriguing story. I'm really bad with titles though, so....

But I did like the idea i ♥ E.C. came up with, having it to do with melting. Though I also agree with Seth, it would be easier to name if we could read a little more.

[Sella, ov vey! i haven't checked this group in months. ><]

intriguing!